I've amended bits, but its reads pretty well for a first effort. I think one of the earlier posters was right - a bit more on subjects and a bit less on extra-curricular stuff would be better balance. You have 47lines with 1.5cm margins on the Electronic Application method! (Yours is about 45 I think)
Geography matters. Without Geography, we would be nowhere! It affects the lives of the six billion of us inhabiting this planet. Complex interactions between humans and our environment affect the world in such a diverse ways on local, regional and global scales. For several years, I have been increasingly certain that Geography is ‘the subject for me’ and therefore the one I wish to continue studying at a higher level. I particularly like the way that Geography spans the social and physical sciences. My choice of A-level subjects was based around this as I chose Sociology because of the overlaps with the Human Geography and Biology links to physical geography topics such as ecosystems. My main interests in Geography lie in urban, rural and retail change and development and the scope for future research within these areas is enticing. I subscribe to Geography Review magazine, which I find particularly interesting as it includes articles on contemporary issues such as international migration.
My hard work and commitment to Geography has been rewarded through my receiving of the Year 9 Geography Award and the GCSE Local Studies Award for Humanities. A contributing factor to my winning of the GCSE Award was my coursework for which I scored full marks and was the only person in my year to do so. Fieldwork is an element of Geography that I relish as it enables greater appreciation of the surrounding world and put theory into practice. For my Personal Investigation at A2 I am conducting an enquiry into [will write in when decided]. The variety of skills offered by a Geography degree, such as cartographic ability, computer literacy and numeracy enhance the value and attractiveness of a subject I am already extremely passionate about.
Outside sixth form hours I am learning web design using HTML, and I am currently designing a website for students regarding [will write in when decided]. I value intellectual stimulation very highly and enjoy watching documentaries and quiz programmes on television. Recently, I found a documentary on “super-cities” quite thought provoking – will England end up as one huge conurbation? As a resident of the New Forest this would concern me very much, especially as I like taking walks through the countryside during my spare time. Keeping active is important to me and throughout school I have been involved in sport – I have represented my school and the New Forest at cross-country and represented my school at 1500m. I also received a five-star athletics award and medals for being a runner up on sports day. Every year I participated in all House sports teams and the House quiz team.
During Year 10, I undertook a work experience placement at a local playgroup, which helped develop both my interpersonal skills with both young children and adults and ability to work as part of a team. In Year 11 I was elected a prefect and my duties included supervising the younger pupils in the lunch queue and general patrolling of the school to sort out any pupil problems. Having positions of responsibility is something I enjoy and at university I look forward to being actively involved in clubs and societies.
I hope that by studying Geography at degree level I will gain a deeper understanding of the world around me. The skills gained through such a degree will be extremely useful not only for my future career but also for life.