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    So, I have a controlled assessment coming up in school, and it is descriptive writing. I have my scene to describe and most of my plan sorted. I was just wondering if anybody had any tips on how to do well within the topic. I know about the 'zoom in' technique and using ambitious vocabulary, and those kinds of things. But, anything else anybody could recommend on how to get a good grade would be helpful.
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    So, I have a controlled assessment coming up in school, and it is descriptive writing. I have my scene to describe and most of my plan sorted. I was just wondering if anybody had any tips on how to do well within the topic. I know about the 'zoom in' technique and using ambitious vocabulary, and those kinds of things. But, anything else anybody could recommend on how to get a good grade would be helpful.
    Thanks x
    Avoid saying things like "I can smell xxx" or "the sound of xxx met my ears." Both are unimaginative. Instead try and tie smells in using elaborate metaphors. Here are a few extracts taken from my English coursework. For example, if you were describing the African bush and wanted to include the smell of burning wood, you could say something like "Tsire and masala substituted the grassy scents of the afternoon." as opposed to the more typical "there was a burning wood smell."

    Remember to use metaphors, substituted names, similes and phonology. Keeping with the African image, this could be continued to include some description of a hotel: "spiralling staircase slowly sinking down into the place of feeding subjecting me to the flavours sub-Saharan Africa."- In this example, the sibilant (s) sounds create a feeling of peace, tranquillity and calmness. Referring to the restaurant as the "place of feeding" helps transport the reader to Africa and strengthens any imagery the reader might have of wild animals in the wilderness.

    Go through this website and look at the devices listed on it. Try and include as many as possible. It's nice to have a wide range of devices. http://literarydevices.net/litotes/

    Hope this helps, if you need and more help just message me.
 
 
 
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