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    Hi !

    I am 16 turning 17 very soon ,I have been trying to get a part time job since last year and I keep getting rejected its really frustrating! I have worked in Boots for work experience, done volunteer work , worked in my family business , I've been applying every single day , I've handed out Cvs and Cover letters . At the moment I do an apprenticeship , working full time and studying but I am meaning to quit this soon and get a part time job and go College in September . I cant even get a job In Primark ! They keep rejecting me and I don't know why!

    Look at my CV please guys I really appreciate if you could let me know how to improve, I have improved it so many times but could use some advise . I cut my name and address out for privacy purposes .

    Nationality: British

    Career Objective:
    I am an articulate, presentable individual who can thrive in any fast paced and busy envoirment. Possessing the ability and confidence to contribute to the smooth running of a company and possessing the ‘can do’ attitude required to be able to get things done. I am a very mature, extremely motivated and hardworking individual with a thirst to learn new skills. I am looking to secure a challenging role, where my unique skills can really contribute to and where I can express my passion of working in the customer service and retail envoirment as I love a busy role and helping others out. Education:
    2008-2013
    Secondary School: Firth Park Community Arts College
    • 5 GCSE’s A*-C including English, Math etc…
    Strengths:
    • Work very well as a team and known to get on with everyone
    • Working individually- This is beneficial because I am able to complete tasks on my own , I can make my own decisions quick without any support
    • Excellent Communication skills- This is also useful because I can communicate with customers and staff well
    • Persuasive skills – This is useful to increase sales
    • I am a very quick learner
    Key Skills:
    • Fast and efficient at tasks given to me
    • Organisation Skills/ Good Punctuality- I have always been prepared with every tasks that comes my way, as well as that my attendance in my previous school has been extremely impressive at an average percentage of 98%.
    • Patient
    • Dependable-I am very reliable to get jobs done to perfection and to come in everyday to work.
    • Very friendly –I would say I’m a very friendly individual; I am known to get along with everyone
    Interests:
    • Keeping up to date with the latest fashion trends
    • Socialising with friends- this shows I am able to work well with others easily and that I enjoy meeting new people
    • Playing various sports, going to the gym
    • Going on the computer browsing the internet and researching
    Work History:
    August 2011- October 2012 Ranis Boutique, Sales Assistant – Family business
    Duties:

    • Helping increase sales
    • Till operation
    • Stock loading
    • Helping and advising customers
    Volunteer work – Royal Castle Lung Cancer charity 2014 February
    Duties:
    - Working as a team
    - Figured out tactics to collect more money
    - Went around town face to face with people informing them about the charity
    March 2012
    Sales Assistant at Boots the Chemist (Work experience)
    Duties:
    • Helping customers with enquiries- I advised customers on which product I feel is best etc...
    • Organising stock- I organised stock in certain categories
    • Increasing sales
    • Tidying shop floor
    March 2014- June 2014
    Apprentice Admin Assistant at the Apprentice Agency/the Workshop (Apprenticeship) (Current Job role)
    Duties:
    • General reception duties, paper work, letters, excel spreadsheets etc…
    • Admin work
    • Booking meetings
    • Sorting out the post

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    With no disrespect I would say your CV needs more of a structure, when looking at it you often just gave a a bullet point , try giving a paragraph ? I also found it to be boring, like your just listing all the skills you've learned its not very interesting to read. (This makes you sound like you think your excellent)

    I mean no disrespect just trying to help

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    (Original post by anonymous288)
    Hi !

    I am 16 turning 17 very soon ,I have been trying to get a part time job since last year and I keep getting rejected it's really frustrating! I have worked in Boots for work experience, done volunteer work , worked in my family business , I've been applying every single day , I've handed out Cvs and Cover letters . At the moment I do an apprenticeship , working full time and studying but I am meaning to quit this soon and get a part time job and go College in September . I cant even get a job In Primark ! They keep rejecting me and I don't know why!

    Look at my CV please guys I really appreciate if you could let me know how to improve, I have improved it so many times but could use some advise . I cut my name and address out for privacy purposes .

    Nationality: British

    Career Objective:
    I am an articulate, presentable individual who can thrive in any fast paced and busy envoirment. Possessing the ability and confidence to contribute to the smooth running of a company and possessing the ‘can do’ attitude required to be able to get things done. I am a very mature, extremely motivated and hardworking individual with a thirst to learn new skills. I am looking to secure a challenging role, where my unique skills can really contribute to and where I can express my passion of working in the customer service and retail envoirment as I love a busy role and helping others out. Education:
    2008-2013
    Secondary School: Firth Park Community Arts College
    • 5 GCSE’s A*-C including English, Math etc…
    Strengths:
    • Work very well as a team and known to get on with everyone
    • Working individually- This is beneficial because I am able to complete tasks on my own , I can make my own decisions quick without any support
    • Excellent Communication skills- This is also useful because I can communicate with customers and staff well
    • Persuasive skills – This is useful to increase sales
    • I am a very quick learner
    Key Skills:
    • Fast and efficient at tasks given to me
    • Organisation Skills/ Good Punctuality- I have always been prepared with every tasks that comes my way, as well as that my attendance in my previous school has been extremely impressive at an average percentage of 98%.
    • Patient
    • Dependable-I am very reliable to get jobs done to perfection and to come in everyday to work.
    • Very friendly –I would say I’m a very friendly individual; I am known to get along with everyone
    Interests:
    • Keeping up to date with the latest fashion trends
    • Socialising with friends- this shows I am able to work well with others easily and that I enjoy meeting new people
    • Playing various sports, going to the gym
    • Going on the computer browsing the internet and researching
    Work History:
    August 2011- October 2012 Ranis Boutique, Sales Assistant – Family business
    Duties:

    • Helping increase sales
    • Till operation
    • Stock loading
    • Helping and advising customers
    Volunteer work – Royal Castle Lung Cancer charity 2014 February
    Duties:
    - Working as a team
    - Figured out tactics to collect more money
    - Went around town face to face with people informing them about the charity
    March 2012
    Sales Assistant at Boots the Chemist (Work experience)
    Duties:
    • Helping customers with enquiries- I advised customers on which product I feel is best etc...
    • Organising stock- I organised stock in certain categories
    • Increasing sales
    • Tidying shop floor
    March 2014- June 2014
    Apprentice Admin Assistant at the Apprentice Agency/the Workshop (Apprenticeship) (Current Job role)
    Duties:
    • General reception duties, paper work, letters, excel spreadsheets etc…
    • Admin work
    • Booking meetings
    • Sorting out the post

    REFERENCE AVAILABLE ON REQUEST
    Hello, I have had a look at your CV. I think that the information contained in your CV is a very good starting point. However, I think that you need to change the way that your CV is presented.

    Your information needs to be set out in a more detailed way by relating your personal skills to the job that you are interested in. I wrote my first CV in a similar way and my tutor told me that using bullet points made it look like it was a shopping list. I cannot guarantee that you will get a job but I feel that you will be more likely to be considered for an interview if you change the presentation of your CV.

    I found that I was invited to more Interviews once I changed the style of my CV.
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      To get a job these days you need:

      To be able to drive
      To have an IQ of 72 billion
      At least 5 years experience of fixing TBMs on Ganymede
      4 arms
      Be flexible. You need to be able to work 10 hours a day except for bank holidays.
      On bank holidays you must be available to work at least 18 hours.
      A resume/CV comparable to Niel Armstrong, Roald Amundsen or Dai Attenborough.

      Ofcourse if you want a job on more than minimum wage then your gonna need better qualifications, abilities and experience.

      Seriously tho it is virtually impossible to get a job, no matter how good you or your CV is. The reason for this is because theres like 10 people for every 1 job vacancy.
      The unemployment is a result of businesses moving to other countries to avoid our governments red tape, excessive H&S requirements and high taxes. Cant say that I blame them tbh.
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        (Original post by cathyhelen)
        Hello, I have had a look at your CV. I think that the information contained in your CV is a very good starting point. However, I think that you need to change the way that your CV is presented.

        Your information needs to be set out in a more detailed way by relating your personal skills to the job that you are interested in. I wrote my first CV in a similar way and my tutor told me that using bullet points made it look like it was a shopping list. I cannot guarantee that you will get a job but I feel that you will be more likely to be considered for an interview if you change the presentation of your CV.

        I found that I was invited to more Interviews once I changed the style of my CV.
        Could you give a decent example of that. Although I do have a paragraph in my CV, I do use bulleted lists. I always thought this made it easier and quicker for an employer to read. After all employers have tons of CVs to get through. Bulleted lists emphasizes your qualifications, experience etc in a convenient way.
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        Your CV needs improving and you need to do a lot showing rather than telling. Use a lot of buzzwords and keep everything concise. I'm sure you'll get there
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        (Original post by cathyhelen)
        Hello, I have had a look at your CV. I think that the information contained in your CV is a very good starting point. However, I think that you need to change the way that your CV is presented.

        Your information needs to be set out in a more detailed way by relating your personal skills to the job that you are interested in. I wrote my first CV in a similar way and my tutor told me that using bullet points made it look like it was a shopping list. I cannot guarantee that you will get a job but I feel that you will be more likely to be considered for an interview if you change the presentation of your CV.

        I found that I was invited to more Interviews once I changed the style of my CV.
        Thanyou for the feedback! But I always thought bullet points would make it look neater and more clear, I didn't know what else to put:/
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        (Original post by coldhell)
        Your CV needs improving and you need to do a lot showing rather than telling. Use a lot of buzzwords and keep everything concise. I'm sure you'll get there
        HAHA! agreed but what is buzz words?
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        (Original post by anonymous288)
        Thanyou for the feedback! But I always thought bullet points would make it look neater and more clear, I didn't know what else to put:/
        I am just working on something that might help.
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        (Original post by cathyhelen)
        I am just working on something that might help.
        thankyou so much<3
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        This is a short example for an imaginary job.

        I enjoy teamwork because I find it very rewarding to work as part of a team. I contributed to my team by agreeing to do overtime when a member of staff was ill. I answered the phone in a polite and respectful manner. Furthermore, I filled out the paperwork promptly and I organised the filing in a concise and organised way. I am always willing to assist my colleagues. Likewise, I am willing to work on weekdays or at the weekend.

        Does any of this help?
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        Hi there,
        I'm sorry to hear you're finding it difficult to find a job. I am currently doing my gap year and I have two jobs in retail. Like others have said above, your CV needs some structure. Personally, I would cut out the part where you mention your nationality. I would then cut down the large paragraph at the beginning about your career objective. Maybe make it one or two lines and save the paragraphs for cover letters. It would be really good if employment history was the next heading, because it's the most relevant subtitle when someone is looking at your CV. I would also get rid of the headings 'Key Skills' and 'Strengths' because you can show that you can do these things when you speak about your employment history.

        These are just my suggestions and I'm sure someone could come up with better ideas. There are so many different approaches to writing a CV. Good luck!
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        Jobs are rejecting you? These jobs seem very mean why do they keep rejecting you and what are you asking the jobs for?
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        (Original post by Laomedeia)
        Could you give a decent example of that. Although I do have a paragraph in my CV, I do use bulleted lists. I always thought this made it easier and quicker for an employer to read. After all employers have tons of CVs to get through. Bulleted lists emphasizes your qualifications, experience etc in a convenient way.
        I use bulleted lists too but they are a bit more detailed... not a paragraph, but the bullet sometimes fills the line
        A good example of what cathyhelen said is... say you have had a job in retail. You would list your communication skills, mental maths from till work, team work (in what instances), manual work from cleaning and carrying stock. If you were to apply for a job in an office, you would emphasise your communication and team working skills, perhaps the mental maths skills depending on the role, but wouldn't say anything about your heavy lifting or cleaning because there would be no need.
       
       
       
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