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    Sarah, ran and fell in to the bath, soaking wet she was from head to toe, was no happy at all.
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    Sarah ran and fell into the bath. Soaking wet from head to toe, she was not happy at all.

    ^ probably better ways to do it tbh xD

    Could I add stuff? This would probably sound better:

    Sarah slipped on the slick tiles of the bathroom and toppled into the bath. The lukewarm water covered her from head to toe, soaking her instantly. As she climbed out of the bath, water dripped off her sodden clothes forming a small puddle by her feet. Sarah was definitely not having a good day.



    ... Or something to that effect I may have gone OTT with my descriptions in that paragraph, but you get my point xD
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    (Original post by thechemistress)
    Sarah ran and fell into the bath. Soaking wet from head to toe, she was not happy at all.

    ^ probably better ways to do it tbh xD

    Could I add stuff? This would probably sound better:

    Sarah slipped on the slick tiles of the bathroom and toppled into the bath. The lukewarm water drenched her from head to toe, soaking her instantly. As she climbed out of the bath, water dripped off her sodden clothes forming a small puddle by her feet. Sarah was definitely not having a good day.



    ... Or something to that effect
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    (Original post by EatAndRevise)
    I love the story.
    Thanks
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    How do I avoid comma splicing any tips? And thanks
 
 
 
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