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    It was the day that I had been dreading all summer; it was results day! As the day got nearer I felt the frights, trembling like someone had caught my tongue. I felt sick, sweaty, anxious and faint all the reasons why I took my mother with me, for the moral support I had hoped for. I entered the room, feeling physically sick, which did not help at all. However, knowing everyone else was in the same position made me feel a tad bit better. I looked around and felt the room swallowing me in, deep inside the white painted walls. The thought of failing gripped every inch of my souls, as I felt fearful like never before. Sitting, and waiting patiently for my results made me wish the worse possible outcomes that would only make me escape this mental torture that had me prisoned from happiness. A natural cause that would make everyone run home to safety was my only hope; only bit of hope I had left within me. Sitting on the narrow bench, drowning in my deep, dark thoughts made me feel hopeless and deprived.
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    It was the day that I had been dreading all summer; it was results day! As the day got nearer I felt the frights, trembling like someone had caught my tongue. I felt sick, sweaty, anxious and faint; all the reasons why I took my mother with me, for the moral support I had hoped for. I entered the room, feeling physically sick, which did not help at all. However, knowing everyone else was in the same position made me feel a tad bit better. I looked around and felt the room swallowing me in, deep inside the white painted walls. The thought of failing gripped every inch of my souls, as I felt fearful like never before. Sitting, (no comma) and waiting patiently for my results made me wish the worse possible outcomes; these that would only make me escape this mental torture that had me prisoned from happiness. A natural cause that would make everyone run home to safety was my only hope; the only bit of hope I had left within me. Sitting on the narrow bench, drowning in my deep, dark thoughts made me feel hopeless and deprived.
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