Personal statement helpWatch
Although many people do not realize that computers play a major role in almost every aspect of our lives, the fact is that they do. And if computers are an essential element of our lives then computer programmers play an important role as well. In Today’s age electronics and computers provide us with many luxuries and advantages we did not have in past generations.
Three years ago I was never the type of person to be interested in something so time consuming, something that demands so much devotion. In fact I was never even interested in school. It was not until the summer of my freshman year in high school that I decided to rearranged the structure of my life. I needed to get my priorities straight. After much preaching from my parents I decided for once to try in school, to put forth a decent effort. ------ blah blah blah
thats all i got so far .. im not very good on words. do you think this statement is heading in the right direction or needs to be scraped?
My reasoning for wanting to join college and gain an education come from strong belief that better education provides far more opportunities and advantages in life.
'Obviously never gained' - i would reword. sounds somewhat condescending and arrogant.
'use these people' - also sound rather insulting..maybe focus more of friendship, determination to make the best of your abilities etc?
when did you come into meaningful contact?
what experience do you have already? why bother going to uni then?
what is your career choice?
try & make this sound more positive..'preaching from parents' - makes you sound immature.. how about 'encouragement' etc. how can you proove this change..? grades improved? extra curriculars etc?
Although many people do not realize that computers play a major role in almost every aspect of our lives, the fact is that they do.