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    (Original post by naxiv)
    Pour les vrais accros la musique est la plus dure des drogues. C'est plus fort que nous. On ne peut pas imaginer une vie sans musique.


    Donnez votre opinion sur l'importance de la musique dans la vie des jeunes.

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    Hey! You need to check some of your agreements/conjugations, for example "Les jeunes sont les victimes le plus affectée" should be les plus affectées. Also it seems that you've conjugated the conditional form of etre wrong a couple times (il serais instead of il serait, il étais instead of il était)
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    Hey! You need to check some of your agreements/conjugations, for example "Les jeunes sont les victimes le plus affectée" should be les plus affectées. Also it seems that you've conjugated the conditional form of etre wrong a couple times (il serais instead of il serait, il étais instead of il était)
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    (Original post by naxiv)
    after this edit, can you comment in vocab, grammar, and accuracy ? X[l
    Yeah sure!
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    (Original post by OliviaFord)
    Yeah sure!
    Sorry, i meant can you comment on my accuracy, vocab and grammar of the essay. My error, hope you understand now
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    Lol what
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    it's cool
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    (Original post by naxiv)
    Lol what
    ton dissertation est cool
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    Lol could you expand pls, accuray, grammar and vocab x
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    A lot of good ideas in there, but would also argue at the bottom of your third paragraph that music, can for certain young people, aid productivity when it comes to homework- although this is arguable,
    Otherwise, very good, apart from a few grammar glitches, which have been mentioned previously
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    Thanks could you do me a big favour..
    Could you comment on my accuracy (/5), grammar (/20), and vocab (/5). thanks
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    A lot of good ideas in there, but would also argue at the bottom of your third paragraph that music, can for certain young people, aid productivity when it comes to homework- although this is arguable,
    Otherwise, very good, apart from a few grammar glitches, which have been mentioned previously
 
 
 
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