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    Hello, I decided to try my hand at writing a poem. This is my first time, i wrote it about my father who passed away when i was a baby. Thoughts?

    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]The Father I Never Knew [/COLOR][COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]
    [/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]The Father I Never Knew,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]An intricate part of my design,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]The Head,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]The unshakable force,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]God's own image,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]Man.[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]But Man was not invincible,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]Man was not irreplaceable,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]The Father I Never Knew,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]Whom Mother said I bore such resemblance to,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]If I searched hard enough in the mirror,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]Perhaps I would find him?[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]Him[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]The Father I Never Knew [/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]Perhaps I would find him in the shape of my nose,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]Or my dimpled cheeks,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]Maybe even in my eldest brother,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]If I thought hard enough,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]Perhaps I could take my mind back,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]Back to my infantile days,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]When he was not so unknown,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]When his soul still rejoiced,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]And his blood still sang,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]Under the merciless African Sun,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]Alas,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]He was nowhere to be found out,[/COLOR]
    [COLOR=rgba(0, 0, 0, 0.701961)]So I stopped searching. [/COLOR]
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    Not sure why it ended up likr that :confused:

    The Father I Never Knew

    The Father I Never Knew,
    An intricate part of my design,
    The Head,
    The unshakable force,
    God's own image,
    Man.
    But Man was not invincible,
    Man was not irreplaceable,
    The Father I Never Knew,
    Whom Mother said I bore such resemblance to,
    If I searched hard enough in the mirror,
    Perhaps I would find him?
    Him
    The Father I Never Knew
    Perhaps I would find him in the shape of my nose,
    Or my dimpled cheeks,
    Maybe even in my eldest brother,
    If I thought hard enough,
    Perhaps I could take my mind back,
    Back to my infantile days,
    When he was not so unknown,
    When his soul still rejoiced,
    And his blood still sang,
    Under the merciless African Sun,
    Alas,
    He was nowhere to be found out,
    So I stopped searching.
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