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    I have ones called:
    'Give Her One From Me.'
    'Self-Disclose.'
    'The Sky Is Green.'
    'Lu, Lucy, or Lucifer?'
    'To be Bold.'

    If you think any of these sound interesting, please quote me so I get notified, and I'll type it here. They're not that good, but I'd still welcome feedback!
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    (Original post by Ridingmyego)
    I have ones called:
    'Give Her One From Me.'
    'Self-Disclose.'
    'The Sky Is Green.'
    'Lu, Lucy, or Lucifer?'
    'To be Bold.'

    If you think any of these sound interesting, please quote me so I get notified, and I'll type it here. They're not that good, but I'd still welcome feedback!
    let the poesy flow
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    (Original post by Ridingmyego)
    I have ones called:
    'Give Her One From Me.'
    'Self-Disclose.'
    'The Sky Is Green.'
    'Lu, Lucy, or Lucifer?'
    'To be Bold.'

    If you think any of these sound interesting, please quote me so I get notified, and I'll type it here. They're not that good, but I'd still welcome feedback!
    I'd like to hear them
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    (Original post by Ridingmyego)
    I have ones called:
    'Give Her One From Me.'
    'Self-Disclose.'
    'The Sky Is Green.'
    'Lu, Lucy, or Lucifer?'
    'To be Bold.'

    If you think any of these sound interesting, please quote me so I get notified, and I'll type it here. They're not that good, but I'd still welcome feedback!
    Feeling lyrical tonight, go ahead. Can't promise I'll like them though
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    (Original post by Ridingmyego)
    I have ones called:
    'Give Her One From Me.'
    'Self-Disclose.'
    'The Sky Is Green.'
    'Lu, Lucy, or Lucifer?'
    'To be Bold.'

    If you think any of these sound interesting, please quote me so I get notified, and I'll type it here. They're not that good, but I'd still welcome feedback!
    I say lets here all of them as I'm sure they'll all have different vibes!
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    (Original post by Ridingmyego)
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    Go ahead - there are plenty of people who'd love to hear them (me included)
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    He

    Feel how quick the quiet comes over,
    Dragging you down beneath the dirt,
    A long day in late October,
    Lu, it seems, is quite the flirt.

    He with eyes that dance at night,
    The Morning Star stares from afar,
    Holding you in his palm,

    I felt Him.

    It is he, you see, who decides,
    Upon your hate and all your lies,
    Whether to be trapped, or to be free,
    He decided when He turned to me,
    That I would burn below,

    With He.
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    Now that I've posted it, I can't help thinking how sh*t it is. But yeah, it's about a near-death experience I had in a motorbike crash in October 2013. Did the whole heart fail/lung fail thing, and was comatose for a while. So figured I'd try writing about it,

    Thank you guys for asking! I wouldn't have posted it otherwise :')
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    Can't offer good quality critique but I really like it
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    (Original post by SiminaM)
    Can't offer good quality critique but I really like it
    That's lovely of you to say, thank you
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    (Original post by Ridingmyego)
    That's lovely of you to say, thank you
    Yw
    Feel free to pm me the rest if you want to/don't feel comfortable to post them here. I'm curious
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    He

    Feel how quick the quiet comes over,
    Dragging you down beneath the dirt,
    A long day in late October,
    Lu, it seems, is quite the flirt.

    He with eyes that dance at night,
    The Morning Star stares from afar,
    Holding you in his palm,

    I felt Him.

    It is he, you see, who decides,
    Upon your hate and all your lies,
    Whether to be trapped, or to be free,
    He decided when He turned to me,
    That I would burn below,

    With He.

    (Original post by Ridingmyego)
    Now that I've posted it, I can't help thinking how sh*t it is. But yeah, it's about a near-death experience I had in a motorbike crash in October 2013. Did the whole heart fail/lung fail thing, and was comatose for a while. So figured I'd try writing about it,

    Thank you guys for asking! I wouldn't have posted it otherwise :')
    It's lovely :love:
    I often find writing about difficult events results in the best kind of poetry, as it is writing fuelled by raw emotion :moon:

    Have you fully recovered now? :hugs:
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    May I share a rather esoteric poem about a personal intellectual struggle I had when I was 16 (I wrote it when I was 16 too)?
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    It's lovely :love:
    I often find writing about difficult events results in the best kind of poetry, as it is writing fuelled by raw emotion :moon:

    Have you fully recovered now? :hugs:
    Thankya for saying so, and I think you're spot on with your insight in regards to writing about the tricky stuff,

    It's been around 18 months since, and I've just finished 2nd year a few days ago with a 67 (not bragging or anything, just details). I was the Head Coach of the basketball team for the year, which has also just ended. Throw in physio, hospital appointments, learning to live with one arm, and an addiction to Oxycodone, and it's been a fairly fast year :') How was your year m'lady?
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    It's lovely :love:
    I often find writing about difficult events results in the best kind of poetry, as it is writing fuelled by raw emotion :moon:

    Have you fully recovered now? :hugs:
    And thank you for the virtual hug, by the way :') it did kinda make me feel a bit warm inside

    Don't laugh! xD
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    i enjoyed your poem... sorry to hear about your crash.

    is Lu a reference to the Celtic god Lug ?
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    (Original post by SiminaM)
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    Feel free to pm me the rest if you want to/don't feel comfortable to post them here. I'm curious
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    (Original post by TorpidPhil)
    May I share a rather esoteric poem about a personal intellectual struggle I had when I was 16 (I wrote it when I was 16 too)?
    of course ! fire away :captain:
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    They're all amazing - keep bugging him about it :giggle:
 
 
 

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