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    Please help me to find out grammatical mistake in the following sentence :-

    They came back with the news that the city had shut down; that there was splintered glass on all the roads.
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    there shouldnt b a "that" after the ;


    just a guess.


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    Originally posted by Unregistered
    Please help me to find out grammatical mistake in the following sentence :-

    They came back with the news that the city had shut down; that there was splintered glass on all the roads.
    I would think that the city would have to be shut down, as it's not really something which can shut itself down. Either way, I think that the first bit of that sentence should either be reflexive or passive, with my opinion veering towards the passive version, i.e. either:

    "They came back with the news that the city had been shut down" - passive - (my preferred)

    or

    "They came back with the news that the city had shut itself down" - reflexive

    As was mentioned by ickle_katy, I don't about using a sub-ordinating conjunction like 'that' after a semi-colon :confused:.

    In the second part "on all of the roads" might be better, don't really think it makes much difference.

    Regards,
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    They came back with the news that the city had been shut down; that there was splintered glass on all the roads.

    Looks fine to me, although I'd recommend a few changes.
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    They came back with news that the city had shut down - there was splintered glass on the roads.

    that is now gramatically correctomondo.
 
 
 
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