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"Hitler regarded the Treaty of Versailles a deterrent from achieving his foreign policy."
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"Hitler regarded the Treaty of Versailles a deterrent from achieving his foreign policy."
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Hitler regarded the Treaty of Versailles as a deterrent to achieving his foreign policy

makes more sense, but why deterrent?
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Hitler regarded the Treaty of Versailles as a deterrent to achieving his foreign policy

makes more sense, but why deterrent?
Its A level coursework, my teacher said my writing is to simple so I want to make it seem more intelligent. Any better words?
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I would probably phrase it: "Hitler viewed the Treaty of Versailles as preventing him from achieving his foreign policy." Or, depending on the context, I might phrase it completely differently. Iunno.
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Its A level coursework, my teacher said my writing is to simple so I want to make it seem more intelligent. Any better words?
The best word is the one that conveys your meaning. I have not worked out what you are trying to say. Why deterrent?
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The best word is the one that conveys your meaning. I have not worked out what you are trying to say. Why deterrent?
Ok so a little context- Hitler wanted to rearm, which was one his FP aims. However, the treaty of versailles forbid im to, thus it was almost an obstacle which stood in his way from achieving his aims.
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Ok so a little context- Hitler wanted to rearm, which was one his FP aims. However, the treaty of versailles forbid im to, thus it was almost an obstacle which stood in his way from achieving his aims.
Well, preventing or obstacle to are obviously better.
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How about obstacle instead of deterrent then?
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