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    Hello
    I am filling in my Cambridge SAQ and I need some grammar advice.
    I am saying that I prefer the cambridge course because........., would i need to use a capital letter for The or course?
    help would be appreciated
    thanks
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    (Original post by lfcrules)
    Hello
    I am filling in my Cambridge SAQ and I need some grammar advice.
    I am saying that I prefer the cambridge course because........., would i need to use a capital letter for The or course?
    help would be appreciated
    thanks
    Perhaps try "I would prefer the opportunity to study [course] at Cambridge because..."
    You could consider scrapping the word 'prefer' altogether, it sounds rather half-hearted. Try "The opportunity to study [course] at Cambridge is important to me because..."
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    (Original post by pineneedles)
    Perhaps try "I would prefer the opportunity to study [course] at Cambridge because..."
    You could consider scrapping the word 'prefer' altogether, it sounds rather half-hearted. Try "The opportunity to study [course] at Cambridge is important to me because..."
    Thankyou for your response , I've also written Detailed knowledge of the human body and how it malfunctions is not only key in understanding diseases patients may present with in a clinical setting, but it also better prepares students who chose to go into medical research - a field which I do not currently wish to enter, but I am certainly open to.


    does this make sense? i wasnt sure how to phrase the last line.
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    (Original post by lfcrules)
    Thankyou for your response , I've also written Detailed knowledge of the human body and how it malfunctions is not only key in understanding the diseases patients may present with in a clinical setting, but it also better prepares students who chose to go into medical research - a field which I do not currently wish to enter, but I am certainly open to.


    does this make sense? i wasnt sure how to phrase the last line.
    You're welcome I'd just like to add though that I'm not experienced in this, I'm just giving my opinion.
    I think the last line would sound better if you said something along the lines of: "...but it would also better prepare me if I choose a career in medical research in the future."
    By rephrasing this line, you're relating the course to you and what you want to do rather than suggesting how the course may benefit another student. The latter sounds a bit impersonal. This is also more succinct and you still imply the fact that you're considering life after the course and different career choices.
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    (Original post by pineneedles)
    You're welcome I'd just like to add though that I'm not experienced in this, I'm just giving my opinion.
    I think the last line would sound better if you said something along the lines of: "...but it would also better prepare me if I choose a career in medical research in the future."
    By rephrasing this line, you're relating the course to you and what you want to do rather than suggesting how the course may benefit another student. The latter sounds a bit impersonal. This is also more succinct and you still imply the fact that you're considering life after the course and different career choices.
    Thank you very much , that does sound a lot better!
 
 
 
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