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    I'm doing the english language Edexcel resit on the 3rd November (I got a C overall last time with a B in the exam), and I've started practising how to structure my answers to the first section- the Of Mice and Men extract question. I'm really struggling with how to write my answers and I don't know how to write "perceptively" which is what I need to do to secure the highest marks possible.

    I've attempted to answer this question," Explore how the language in the extract influences the reader's view of the setting."
    (The extract is from the first page of the novel)

    And I wrote:

    The writer has used figurative language throughout the whole of the extract to influence the reader's view of the setting.
    Firstly, Steinbeck uses harsh adjectives to describe the setting to represent the fragility of humanity in comparison to the forces that control our lives. For example, "mottled, white, recumbent limbs". The purpose of the rule of three is to emphasise the idea of the theme of death, which is subconsciously reinforced throughout the novella, to foreshadow the inevitability of Lennie's death. The word "white" suggests stillness; implying lifelessness, like the colour of the skin of the deceased. The additional use of the word "limbs" personifies the sycamore and makes the reader feel that tragedy will strike, to ruin the beautiful imagery of Soledad, Steinbeck has created in the reader's mind.

    I feel like I just waffle on rather than answer the question.How can I improve my answer to at least an A grade? I need an A in the exam to get a B overall😁 thank you!
 
 
 
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