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    Can someone please help me im stuck for ideas the task is
    Describe what you see and hear from a hiding place.
    Its a piece of decriptive writing
    Im not sure what to put in each paragraph
    if someone could help with a plan

    First of all you have to think about what you are hiding from and why because you will be experiencing very different things if you are being hunted down than if you're playing hide-and-seek.

    Second of all, where are you hiding? If it's a cramped space you might not be able to see a great deal and your breathing might sound louder (unless you're holding your breath. you might also be breathing heavily if you've been running). You also might tend to notice little things more, like swallowing saliva (how frequently are you swallowing?) or your heart beats (how fast are they?)

    Thirdly, what are your hunters / seekers doing? Are they taunting you? Talking to each other, running? Think about little things like a cough or sniff (like a cold) to add that little bit of extra detail, but don't go off on a tangent, stick to the theme of the project you've been assigned.

    Lastly, don't forget to be descriptive, it's descriptive writing after all. Use adjectives: instead of just saying "the sound her voice" for example. Adding something simple, even just one word can make a sentence that little bit more interesting for example "the sound of her hoarse voice". It's also important that you don't use the same words over and over unless you're doing it deliberately in an obvious way (repetition to emphases a point, or anaphora which is either repeating the start of a sentence or the end of a sentence) so if you're struggling to think of another word for "but", "sound", "sight" or anything at all, use a thesaurus (if you have access to one. if not just think really hard or ask someone else) There are other key things to use such as similies, alliteration, metaphors, all that jazz.

    That's not really a structure, just more things to keep in mind. I'm not sure if I can help you with a structure, but make sure you have a clear beginning and a clear ending and use paragraphs when changing the subject.
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