English - Help With Tenses

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I am currently writing a Narrative in first person and present tense for an English controlled assessment.

Here is an extract from my narrative: 'Nothing can be heard for a moment besides the whoosh of wind as it brushes my sorrowful cheek.'

Is this correctly written in the present tense (specifically 'Nothing can be heard')?

Thanks in advance.
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I am currently writing a Narrative in first person and present tense for an English controlled assessment.

Here is an extract from my narrative: 'Nothing can be heard for a moment besides the whoosh of wind as it brushes my sorrowful cheek.'

Is correctly written in the present tense (specifically 'Nothing can be heard'?

Thanks in advance.
It should be "could be heard".

Can is present tense.
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It should be "could be heard".

Can is present tense.
But I want the text to be present tense?
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I am currently writing a Narrative in first person and present tense for an English controlled assessment.

Here is an extract from my narrative: 'Nothing can be heard for a moment besides the whoosh of wind as it brushes my sorrowful cheek.'

Is this correctly written in the present tense (specifically 'Nothing can be heard'?

Thanks in advance.
Personally, I would agree with 'could be heard'.... I just think it sounds better
However, if you are going strictly with the present tense (not conditional), I think it would be better to write: 'For a moment, nothing can be heard besides the whoosh of the wind as it brushes my sorrowful cheek'
You could also try:
'For a moment, I can hear nothing but the whoosh of the wind as it brushes my sorrowful cheek'
Honestly, I'm having trouble with 'for a moment' being used in the present, maybe change it to 'At the moment'.
I'm not too sure about any of this but good luck!
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Personally, I would agree with 'could be heard'.... I just think it sounds better
However, if you are going strictly with the present tense (not conditional), I think it would be better to write: 'For a moment, nothing can be heard besides the whoosh of the wind as it brushes my sorrowful cheek'
You could also try:
'For a moment, I can hear nothing but the whoosh of the wind as it brushes my sorrowful cheek'
Honestly, I'm having trouble with 'for a moment' being used in the present, maybe change it to 'At the moment'.
I'm not too sure about any of this but good luck!
Apparently, 'could' is the past of 'can', so I think that 'can' is actually right.
I think I'll stick with what I've written because it looks right to me. Thanks!
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