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    I am in year 11, and doing descriptive writing as part of our language coursework. I have written a draft and was wondering if anyone could read through it and tell me what grade they think it is? And what you would improve?
    It's very well written, so well done for that

    Other than the onomatopoeia and metaphors at the end (which I really like), you could include more techniques and devices throughout subtly, like lists of three and personification I'd say at the minute it would be a high A though
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    I am in year 11, and doing descriptive writing as part of our language coursework. I have written a draft and was wondering if anyone could read through it and tell me what grade they think it is? And what you would improve?
    C, B if you're lucky.

    It was good in idea but you need to use a varying range of language techniques and structure in order to get safely into a B grade. Include a one sentence paragraph and personification as well as an extended metaphor to push for an a grade
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    (Original post by Gingerbread101)
    It's very well written, so well done for that

    Other than the onomatopoeia and metaphors at the end (which I really like), you could include more techniques and devices throughout subtly, like lists of three and personification I'd say at the minute it would be a high A though
    that would not get an A
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    C, B if you're lucky.

    It was good in idea but you need to use a varying range of language techniques and structure in order to get safely into a B grade. Include a one sentence paragraph and personification as well as an extended metaphor to push for an a grade
    LOOOL WTF. Are you mad? Op if im honest just ignore this person, I would say an A.
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    (Original post by Kholmes1)
    LOOOL WTF. Are you mad? Op if im honest just ignore this person, I would say an A.
    I'm speaking from experience
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    can I ask what you got?
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    what did u get?
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    i got a B.
 
 
 
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