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    (Original post by Anonymous)
    This took me several weeks to write so please tell me what you think:

    Now, I can’t live without you
    What’s my life without you
    If I part with you
    Then I will part with myself too
    Because you are the one
    You are my life
    My peace and my pain
    Now, only you are my love
    Our relationship is such thatI can’t stand even a moment away from you
    Everyday I am living for you
    All my time is given to you
    None of my moment is complete without you
    Every breath bears your name
    Because you are the one
    You are my life
    Now, only you are my loveI have lived only for you
    That I gave myself to you
    Being loyal to you kept me on track
    Removed all the pain from heart
    Now, my life is only with you
    Oh my love, I feel complete after I got you
    Because you are the one
    Now you are the one
    i think it is lovely.
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    abit too overboard
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    its too creepy + stalker-ish.....

    just ask her out, the poem may freak her out... but its a nice poem.... just too far for a crush
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    Your fondness of 'you'

    Seems achingly prevalent

    Pacify said urge
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    Creepy and weird!
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    (Original post by Anonymous)
    This took me several weeks to write so please tell me what you think:

    Now, I can’t live without you
    What’s my life without you
    If I part with you
    Then I will part with myself too
    Because you are the one
    You are my life
    My peace and my pain
    Now, only you are my love
    Our relationship is such thatI can’t stand even a moment away from you
    Everyday I am living for you
    All my time is given to you
    None of my moment is complete without you
    Every breath bears your name
    Because you are the one
    You are my life
    Now, only you are my loveI have lived only for you
    That I gave myself to you
    Being loyal to you kept me on track
    Removed all the pain from heart
    Now, my life is only with you
    Oh my love, I feel complete after I got you
    Because you are the one
    Now you are the one
    When are you asking her out?
    Are you even friends?
    Amazing poem , but you should just compliment & say what's special about her x
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    (Original post by Anonymous)
    This took me several weeks to write so please tell me what you think:

    Hey, what are you up to this weekend?
    I was wondering if you wanted to grab lunch at some point?
    Yeah I think that's perfect.
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    (Original post by Jamie S)
    Yeah I think that's perfect.
    Is that how guys ask girls out?
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    (Original post by Anonbabes)
    Is that how guys ask girls out?
    nah, you just text them init
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    just send her this simples

    https://youtu.be/6laGvKtPZYQ
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    (Original post by Jamie S)
    nah, you just text them init
    What if you don't have her number?
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    (Original post by Anonymous)
    Well... looks like it was fun while it lasted.
    Search up the lyrics for "Tum Hi Ho".
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    *Crawls back under the bridge*
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    Look up the lyrics for 'Under The Bridge'; I think you'll find them highly apposite.
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    (Original post by Anonbabes)
    What if you don't have her number?
    Ring every number until you get the right one.

    His mobile (if from the UK) will be: 07+9 random digits

    9 digits that can repeat so 10^9 (0-9 are ten choices)

    10^9 = 1,000,000,000 = One billion different numbers.

    Takes 10 seconds to call each one to check if it's him:

    10^9 * 10 = 10^10 seconds to try every number.

    If he was the last number to call then 10^10/3600 = 2777778 hours of calling = 318 years.

    So if you just keep trying for over 3 centuries you are guaranteed to call his number.
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    (Original post by Anonymous)
    This took me several weeks to write so please tell me what you think:

    Now, I can’t live without you
    What’s my life without you
    If I part with you
    Then I will part with myself too
    Because you are the one
    You are my life
    My peace and my pain
    Now, only you are my love
    Our relationship is such thatI can’t stand even a moment away from you
    Everyday I am living for you
    All my time is given to you
    None of my moment is complete without you
    Every breath bears your name
    Because you are the one
    You are my life
    Now, only you are my loveI have lived only for you
    That I gave myself to you
    Being loyal to you kept me on track
    Removed all the pain from heart
    Now, my life is only with you
    Oh my love, I feel complete after I got you
    Because you are the one
    Now you are the one
    I reckon it'd be cute if you were already together. Maybe not mate. Poems like that are too deep. I know that I'd find that a bit creepy. I'd prefer for you just to say 'look I like you' myself!
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    You're dead serious, You're so nervous, you haven't scratched the surface,
    Your heart is jumpin' - pumpin', but you think you're onto somethin'

    You're sending the letter tomorrow, you don't care about no sorrow:
    That dead feeling you'll get when she says "To me you're just a bro".

    Then you'll write it all again and hand it in before 10,
    But she's already banging this big barmy fella Ben.

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    My poor white boy rapping skills ...

    In all seriousness OP, sending her a letter is one of the worse things you can do.

    You clearly have no idea if she likes you or not... so either 1) She'll read it, freak out and run to her girl friends OR, if you're really, really lucky 2) Sit on your ****.
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    (Original post by Jamie S)
    Ring every number until you get the right one.

    His mobile (if from the UK) will be: 07+9 random digits

    9 digits that can repeat so 10^9 (0-9 are ten choices)

    10^9 = 1,000,000,000 = One billion different numbers.

    Takes 10 seconds to call each one to check if it's him:

    10^9 * 10 = 10^10 seconds to try every number.

    If he was the last number to call then 10^10/3600 = 2777778 hours of calling = 318 years.

    So if you just keep trying for over 3 centuries you are guaranteed to call his number.
    http://25.media.tumblr.com/9a38d3e2a...oufuo1_250.gif
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    Lol people still think I'm serious.

    This is "my poem" :
    https://youtu.be/Cz8PQVSWoxY
 
 
 
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