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    (Original post by LogicalFallacy)
    Good start so far, however you have overused small in the start. You have also made several punctuation errors, and repeated "The first test". There is a spelling mistake with 'once' where you put 'one'. Multiple verbs are used too many times. You repeated but ("But, but". I don't know if this was on purpose, but you forgot a capital letter in the first entry. There is an awfully large amount of speech, which should be mixed in with descriptions to make it more gripping to read. A capital letter is forgotten at "Tachyons are particles".

    Other than that, I enjoyed it.
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    ill read it when i get the time, ill tell you what i think of it then
 
 
 
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