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    (Original post by Bigpaddy27)
    HOW MANY MARKS ROUGHLY OUT OF 35 IS THIS????
    Beruf oder Kinder? Welche Vorteile und Nachteile gibt es hier?

    Einleitend möchte ich sagen, dass es positive und negative Aspekt haben kann, einen Beruf auszuüben bzw. Sich ausschließlich um die Kindererziehung zu kümmern. Viele sind der Meinung, dass es ungewöhnlich oder ungerecht ist, wenn einige Leute arbeitslos sind. Jedoch sind viele auch der Meinung, dass es unnatürlich ist, wenn man keine Kinder hat. In diesem Aufsatz, werde ich diskutieren, ob man zwischen Beruf und Kindern wählen sollte und warum es Beruf ,,oder” Kinder heißt.

    Erstens vertrete ich die Ansicht, dass man ohne einen Beruf deprimiert werden kann, weil Geld eine wichtige Rolle für uns spielt. Zum Beispiel können wir mit Geld materialistische Dinge kaufen. Wenn man keinen Beruf hat, kann man nicht so viel kaufen und deshalb, glaube ich, dass es wichtig ist, einen Beruf zu haben. Jedoch muss ich sagen, dass es nicht immer Positiv ist wenn man einen Beruf hat. Um erfolgreich im Beruf zu sein, muss man gut unter Druck arbeitet! Das kann sehr schwer sein zB wenn man mit Leuten zusammen arbeiten, sollte man immer respektvoll sein und das kann in Konfliktsituation so viel Druck schaffen. Um dieses Problem zu vermeiden, kann man argumentieren, dass es ohne Beruf am besten ist.

    Zweitens könnte man im Gegensatz meinen, dass wir Kinder haben sollten um glücklich zu sein, weil Familie uns glücklich macht. Zu den wichtigsten Vorteilen der Kinder gehört, dass Kinder uns geduldiger machen können. Die Verbindung auch zwischen Kindern und Verantwortung ist eindeutig- um Eltern zu werden, muss man sehr immer verantwortungsvoll sein. Aber man darf nicht vergessen, dass Kinder teuer sein können zB Markenkleidung kann so viel kosten. Ich bin der Auffassung, dass es in Bezug zu den Kosten der Kinder ein Nachteil sein kann.

    Zusammenfassend möchte ich fragen: Warum müssen wir wählen? Wenn ich älter wäre, würde ich Kindern und einen Beruf haben, weil es spannend aussieht. Wir leben in einer modernen Gesellschaft und deshalb, bin ich der Meinung, dass wir nicht zwischen Kindern ‘oder’ Beruf wählen müssen. Wir können uns für beide entscheiden. In der Vergangenheit war es anders als heute- man durfte nicht Kinder und Beruf haben (besonders Frauen), aber heute sind Frauen und Männer gleichgestellt und deshalb, sollten wir nicht zwischen Kindern ‘oder’ Beruf entscheiden. Wir werden beide haben!
    Hey

    If I was to guess, I'd put you somewhere around 29 marks.

    Good things:

    - You've used a lot of opinion phrases (muss sagen, vertrete ich, möchte ich fragen) which are good and a lot better than typical ich finde/ich denke.
    - You've raised a lot of points and responded to the question quite well. You raise advantages and disadvantages and generally explain yourself quite well.
    - AFAICT word order/accuracy is really, really good.

    Things you could improve:

    - Use more advanced grammar. If you want to break into 5/5 for structure/range (grammar) you will need to use the subjunctive a lot more often and try to use the passive as well.
    - Use more specific vocab. Some of the words you're using are quite generic - e.g. "can buy so much" > elaborate on so much; say words like commodities or household bills and so on. You could replace Geld with Lohn (pay/income) in first paragraph for another example.
    - You've written quite a lot. I checked and it's around 370 which is a fairrr amount; I try not to go over 300 words in my essays and I've managed to achieve full marks with 290 words. I know it's hard to do it because you want to elaborate your points, but at the same time be cautious you aren't just over-elaborating one point instead of focusing on making many points. Word count doesn't matter that much but it should be concise and not dragged out

    I'd probably guess somewhere around 16/17 for content, 3/4 for structure, 5 for accuracy and 3 for range.

    This is just my own opinion though Try comparing it to past essays you've written and see what areas you should be focusing on to raise your marks.
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    (Original post by Inexorably)
    Hey

    If I was to guess, I'd put you somewhere around 29 marks.

    Good things:

    - You've used a lot of opinion phrases (muss sagen, vertrete ich, möchte ich fragen) which are good and a lot better than typical ich finde/ich denke.
    - You've raised a lot of points and responded to the question quite well. You raise advantages and disadvantages and generally explain yourself quite well.
    - AFAICT word order/accuracy is really, really good.

    Things you could improve:

    - Use more advanced grammar. If you want to break into 5/5 for structure/range (grammar) you will need to use the subjunctive a lot more often and try to use the passive as well.
    - Use more specific vocab. Some of the words you're using are quite generic - e.g. "can buy so much" > elaborate on so much; say words like commodities or household bills and so on. You could replace Geld with Lohn (pay/income) in first paragraph for another example.
    - You've written quite a lot. I checked and it's around 370 which is a fairrr amount; I try not to go over 300 words in my essays and I've managed to achieve full marks with 290 words. I know it's hard to do it because you want to elaborate your points, but at the same time be cautious you aren't just over-elaborating one point instead of focusing on making many points. Word count doesn't matter that much but it should be concise and not dragged out

    I'd probably guess somewhere around 16/17 for content, 3/4 for structure, 5 for accuracy and 3 for range.

    This is just my own opinion though Try comparing it to past essays you've written and see what areas you should be focusing on to raise your marks.
    Thank you very much for your reply, i appreciate it. I am aiming for an A grade in my German AS level and grammar and the essay has always been my downfall (17 marks on the essay in my December mock)... I find it hard to include the passive and to increase my rage of sophisticated grammar but I will try. One last question- if you don't mind... Can you recommend a good grammar book and how is best to learn vocabulary? many thanks
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    (Original post by Bigpaddy27)
    Thank you very much for your reply, i appreciate it. I am aiming for an A grade in my German AS level and grammar and the essay has always been my downfall (17 marks on the essay in my December mock)... I find it hard to include the passive and to increase my rage of sophisticated grammar but I will try. One last question- if you don't mind... Can you recommend a good grammar book and how is best to learn vocabulary? many thanks
    With the subjunctive/passive; even if you seem like you're using it a lot, just use it. Don't make every sentence like it, but try so hard to use it on at least 4 occasions I'd say. It seems like overusing but the examiners go crazy. Also try to use a variety of tenses as well - pluperfect is especially eyecatching tho idk why it's not that hard.

    Grammar book, honestly not really. IF you have access to a copy of Hammer's German Grammar then that book is AMAZING and goes into detail on everything. But it might be a little complex and overwhelm you at first - but it will cover everything you could ever need, though it might be expensive. Apart from that; Aktion Grammatik! is relatively good as well and cheaper.

    Wort für Wort is a good book for vocab which covers AQA topics as well.

    As for learning vocab - find something that works for you. If flashcards work; use them, if just going through lists covering up and memorising works then go for it, if you need to listen to the vocab go for it. I personally use a technique involving powerpoint - on the first slide i put the english term e..g "to build" then on the next slide it's a picture of someone building (e..g) and the word (e..g bauen) so i associate the word with the picture ato get to the german word. It's worked quite well but now I'm at a point where I can learn vocab with great ease regardless of technique.
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    How is everyone revising for the written exam? revising the essay writing is easy enough, revising for the orals is going well and doing listening tasks however for the general reading tasks etc how are you revising? DO you think collecting vocab is best as it may be in the reading passages...
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    I have my speaking exam tomorrow! Wish me luck!
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    I thought all speaking exams took place on same day, how come they're notttttt.

    (Original post by Bigpaddy27)
    How is everyone revising for the written exam? revising the essay writing is easy enough, revising for the orals is going well and doing listening tasks however for the general reading tasks etc how are you revising? DO you think collecting vocab is best as it may be in the reading passages...
    Pretty much just vocab for reading. Not much else you can do really, except get used to complex sentences.

    Also be careful you don't copy unnecessary info from the reading thing into your answer (as you can not be awarded a mark for such a thing )
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    (Original post by Inexorably)
    I thought all speaking exams took place on same day, how come they're notttttt.



    Pretty much just vocab for reading. Not much else you can do really, except get used to complex sentences.

    Also be careful you don't copy unnecessary info from the reading thing into your answer (as you can not be awarded a mark for such a thing )
    Ok thank you! My oral exam is on the 3rd of May... Also your prediction for my previous essay was pretty spot on- 30 marks. I am now just trying to bring in much more grammar such as the subjunctive.
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    (Original post by Bigpaddy27)
    Ok thank you! My oral exam is on the 3rd of May... Also your prediction for my previous essay was pretty spot on- 30 marks. I am now just trying to bring in much more grammar such as the subjunctive.
    3rd of may?! Why is mine sooo early.

    And woohoo, I was worried I was gonna be completely off mark haha. Congrats though, 30/35 is great
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    I THINK I'M DEVELOPING A SORE THROAT THIS CAN'T HAPPEN 1 DAY BEFORE MY SPEAKING.
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    (Original post by Inexorably)
    3rd of may?! Why is mine sooo early.

    And woohoo, I was worried I was gonna be completely off mark haha. Congrats though, 30/35 is great
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    I THINK I'M DEVELOPING A SORE THROAT THIS CAN'T HAPPEN 1 DAY BEFORE MY SPEAKING.
    Good luck in your speaking exam! Do your best! Let us know how you got on afterwards... Thank you
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    (Original post by limadima)
    I have a great idea, does anyone want to exchange number so we could text in german?

    Ja, bestimmt! Auf Handy oder Facebook?

    That would be so cool and we could help eachother!
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    I had my speaking today!!!

    In good news I DIDNT LOSE MY VOICE MY THROAT IS STILL SORE BUT I MANAGED TO DO FINE yay
    In some bad news I was initially offered 2 cards of which one I couldn't take because I chose it as my topic...woops.

    I did card A (on music...which was actually pretty uhh difficult woops) and i was asked on my chosen topic (Gesund Leben) + werbung and familie
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    I almost cried because i kept saying "UMM AHH UMM" so ****ing often and as soon as the tape stopped recording i slammed my head down on the desk and said IM SO SORRY I SAID UMM SO OFTEN IM SORRY IT WAS BAD

    i asked the teacher if she could guess where id be and she said definitely within top 2 grades, but she wouldn't give me an exact

    so yay
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    (Original post by Inexorably)
    I had my speaking today!!!

    In good news I DIDNT LOSE MY VOICE MY THROAT IS STILL SORE BUT I MANAGED TO DO FINE yay
    In some bad news I was initially offered 2 cards of which one I couldn't take because I chose it as my topic...woops.

    I did card A (on music...which was actually pretty uhh difficult woops) and i was asked on my chosen topic (Gesund Leben) + werbung and familie
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    I almost cried because i kept saying "UMM AHH UMM" so ****ing often and as soon as the tape stopped recording i slammed my head down on the desk and said IM SO SORRY I SAID UMM SO OFTEN IM SORRY IT WAS BAD

    i asked the teacher if she could guess where id be and she said definitely within top 2 grades, but she wouldn't give me an exact

    so yay
    Sounded intense! Glad you felt it went well overall!
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    Mine is 4th May I'm so worried ahhhh!! Do you have any tips on how to revise well for it all? I'm so bad at saying um and I need to stop pausing so often, in my last mock a few months ago I got 37/50 which was without revision so I'm just praying I do well!
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    (Original post by Bigpaddy27)
    Sounded intense! Glad you felt it went well overall!
    Thanks

    (Original post by hattybieber)
    Mine is 4th May I'm so worried ahhhh!! Do you have any tips on how to revise well for it all? I'm so bad at saying um and I need to stop pausing so often, in my last mock a few months ago I got 37/50 which was without revision so I'm just praying I do well!
    Just revise loads of specific vocab for each area and have some complicated grammatical structures ready.
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    (Original post by Inexorably)
    I had my speaking today!!!

    In good news I DIDNT LOSE MY VOICE MY THROAT IS STILL SORE BUT I MANAGED TO DO FINE yay
    In some bad news I was initially offered 2 cards of which one I couldn't take because I chose it as my topic...woops.

    I did card A (on music...which was actually pretty uhh difficult woops) and i was asked on my chosen topic (Gesund Leben) + werbung and familie
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    I almost cried because i kept saying "UMM AHH UMM" so ****ing often and as soon as the tape stopped recording i slammed my head down on the desk and said IM SO SORRY I SAID UMM SO OFTEN IM SORRY IT WAS BAD

    i asked the teacher if she could guess where id be and she said definitely within top 2 grades, but she wouldn't give me an exact

    so yay
    Yeah, I saw the Musik one. Avoided that card immediately and chose Urlaub.
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    (Original post by greentron6)
    Yeah, I saw the Musik one. Avoided that card immediately and chose Urlaub.
    I couldn't be offered that one (was offered it by mistake ;/) the other was family & relationships and was about grandparents keeping in touch with children or something.

    I always refuse to pick a family one on a card because I find it soooo much easier to just wing that one when it comes up, than let's say music or fashion.

    But needless to say that card was so challenging and i seemingly have a habit of picking difficult cards in all my mocks and now the real deal
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    (Original post by Inexorably)
    I couldn't be offered that one (was offered it by mistake ;/) the other was family & relationships and was about grandparents keeping in touch with children or something.

    I always refuse to pick a family one on a card because I find it soooo much easier to just wing that one when it comes up, than let's say music or fashion.

    But needless to say that card was so challenging and i seemingly have a habit of picking difficult cards in all my mocks and now the real deal
    Hopefully, you'll be fine.
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    Sorry I haven't put this up earlier and that this isn't the full list of questions, but these are some of the summary questions my teachers gave us at the end of each sub-topic...
    Sport and Exercise:
    Welche Rolle spielt Sport in ihrem Leben?
    Warum ist es wichtig, Sport zu treiben?
    Muss Sport viel kosten?
    Was halten Sie von Fitness-Clubs?
    Was war die erste Sportart, die Sie als Kind betrieben haben?
    Was magst du lieber – traditionelle oder Trendsportarten z.B. Kanufahren, Seilspringen, Wakeboarden? Warum?
    Was sind die Vorteile, eine Sport zu treiben?
    Was sind die Nachteile, eine Sport zu treiben?
    Welcher Sport macht wirklich fit, deiner Meinung nach? Warum?
    Was fur eine Person soll Vorbild im Sport sein?

    Health and Well-being
    Was sind die Gefahren des Rauchens/ des Alkoholkonsums/ des Drogenkonsums?
    Was kann man gegen der steigende Anzahl von Drogensuchtigen?
    Soll man das Rauchen total verbieten? Was ist deiner Meinung dazu?
    Sollte es strengere Kontrollen geben?
    Warum ist eine gesunde Ernährung wichtig ?
    Was ist eigentlich eine gesunde Ernährung? Ernähren Sie sich gesund?
    Was sind die Nachteile von einer ungesunde Ernährung?
    Welche Grunde gibt es fur Magersucht?
    Warum leiden viele (junge) Leute heutzutage unter Stress?
    Was ware ihre Tipps fur eine gutes ausgewogenes Privatleben?
    Was sind die Nachteile eines überlastetes/stressiges Leben?
    Was würden sie tun, wenn sie kein Gleichgewicht im Leben hätten?

    Holidays

    Was machen Sie am liebsten im Urlaub?
    Warum ist es wichtig Urlaub zu haben?
    Fahren Sie lieber mit Ihrer Familie oder mit Freunden auf Urlaub? Warum?
    Was ist die Zukunft des Reisens?
    Was sind jetzt die Urlaubtrends fur junge Leute?
    Was ist fur Sie wichtig bei der Wahl eines Urlaubs?
    Welche positiven/ negativen Folgen hat der Tourismus fur eine Region?
    Was heisst ‘Sanfter Tourismus’? Was kann die Regierung machen, um die Umwelt zu schützen?

    Relationships within the family
    Gibt es heutzutage noch eine typische Familie?
    Ist es Ihrer Meinung nach wichtig, dass ein Kind mit beiden Eltern aufwachst ? Warum (nicht)?
    Welche Konflikte gibt es häufig zwischen Eltern und Kindern?
    Was sind gute Eltern, deiner Meinung nach?
    Kann man ein gutes Verhaltnis mit den Eltern haben? Was ware ein gutes Verhältnis deiner Meinung nach?
    Was heisst eine Familie fur Sie?
    Gibt es Ihrer Meinung nach eine ideale Familie? Wie sieht sie aus?
    Was ist in einer Familie wichtig fur Sie?
    Welche Vor oder Nachteile hat es Geschwister zu haben?
    Was ist fur sie gar nicht wichtig in einer Familie zu haben?
    Gibt es Aehnlichkeiten zwischen die alte und die junge Generationen? Was sind sie?

    Friendships

    Wie wichtig ist es Freunde zu haben? Warum?
    Welche Eigenschaften hat ein guter Freund/ eine gute Freundin?
    Kann man mehr als einen besten Freund haben?
    Welche Konflikte kann es zwischen Freunden geben? Wie kann man sie lösen?
    Worüber sprechen Sie mit Ihren Freunden?
    Was sind die häufigste Probleme, die zwischen Freunden vorkommen, deiner Meinung nach?
    Wie sind sich Liebe und Freundschaft ähnlich? Wie unterscheiden sie sich ihrer Meinung nach?
    Was erwarten Sie von einem Partner/einer Partnerin?
    Was ist Ihnen in einer Beziehung wichtig?

    Marriage/ Partnerships

    Ist die Ehe Ihrer Meinung nach altmodisch?
    Welche Probleme kann die Scheidung / die Trennung der Eltern verursachen?
    Wer sollte sich in einer Ehe/ Partnerschaft um die Kinder kümmern?
    Sind sie fur oder gegen die Ehe? Was ist Ihrer Meinung dazu?
    Was passiert heutzutage in die meisten Familie? Ist es besser in einer Familie mit heiratende Eltern zu wohnen ?
    Was fur eine Rolle würden Sie spielen, wenn Sie verheiratet waren ?
    Welche Vor - / Nachteile hat das Leben als Single?
    Was würden Sie wählen – allein sein oder eine Partnerin/einen Partner finden?

    Mode
    Ist Mode wichtig für dich?
    Welche Kleidung trägst du am liebsten? Warum? / Welcher Kleidungstil gefällt dir am besten?
    Wie ist deine Meinung zu Markenkleidung / Designerkleidung?
    Wie findest su sie Supermodels?
    Was findest du atttraktiv (oder nicht) an einem Jungen / Mädchen?
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    hey everyone

    my AS oral is in 2 weeks today! i think im pretty well prepared for it, but oh man. speaking is my weakest part.

    how's everyone else doing? everyone ready for the exams?
 
 
 
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