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    I'd really appreciate if any of you fine fellows could give me feedback on my History essay.

    I'm doing AS OCR History, The Early Stuarts and the English Revolution 1603-60. The essay question was 'How far were the actions of Charles I the main reason for the outbreak of civil war in England in 1642?'

    Thanks very much!
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    The essay is good and I didn't have time to go over all the paragraphs! However, you only need about 4 paragraphs! You don't need this many and it will save you more time in the exam. In History I always thought it was 2 points against and 2 points for. But, I have a History tutor who helps me with essay technique and planning and it's better to build up to your argument but of course consider both viewpoints.. I hope this helps! Feel free to message me we could help each other out for revision!
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    (Original post by Abstract_Prism)
    I'd really appreciate if any of you fine fellows could give me feedback on my History essay.

    I'm doing AS OCR History, The Early Stuarts and the English Revolution 1603-60. The essay question was 'How far were the actions of Charles I the main reason for the outbreak of civil war in England in 1642?'

    Thanks very much!
    Hi there! Your essay already looks very good. Clear, reasoned arguments, and a solid conclusion. If you're interested in some general essay advice for history and other humanities subjects, I think these are some useful articles:

    http://www.thetutorpages.com/tutor-a...-planning/7537

    http://www.thetutorpages.com/tutor-a...-an-essay/3308

    http://www.thetutorpages.com/tutor-a...roduction/4160

    And here's a blog post that brings together some of the main tips:

    http://www.thetutorpages.com/blog/si...essay-writing/

    Good luck!
 
 
 

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