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    I’m trapped in a realm where the Earth spins anticlockwise if I wish it. My dreams are a reality and reality is a nightmare, accessed through the lense of the camera; images transferred to the screen. Yet truth is nothing more than the shadows cast on the cave wall by the fires behind me. God, I can hear them and the flames roar and flicker. I pull at my hair and they attempt to encircle me. Capture me. I can see them wincing from the corners of my eyes.

    They can't. They can't break through.

    What do you do when you live life in projection? What can you do when the bubble can't be popped and it morphs to your form? The bubble is you and you're dizzy.

    You pull at my chains, but I can't break free. I scream. I stamp. You raise Hell. Then the flames advance. Slowly at first, but soon the tsunami of fire descends. As my skin is seared, I become aware of an invincibility. They can touch me; they can cause brief flashes of heat and twisted anguish, but they cannot truly hurt me. The injury caused by the past cannot - will not - stop me.

    The struggle has not been a lie. Sometimes it deafens me so that there is nothing beyond the dull roar of the dancing flames. Yet you don't let it enable the burden. The energy required exhausts me, but slowly and steadily, it is diffused. Sometimes, yes, sometimes, the instrument is hit and the twang rings, but the sharp note simmers to a melody and before long it resonates as a clear tune. It substantiates the cause and I meekly smile. The smile was unconvincing, unbelievable. I'm sorry. You're frustrated for me and I stumble, misunderstanding; not ready to jump. The remains of the echoes ripple. First entering my feet, then legs, then chest and then pound at my head. One dull punch after another. Knock Out.

    It is unsustainable to continue the fantasy: “try harder” you breathe.
    "Wait. I’m not sure I want reality… what if I’m not ready? Why can’t the blunt magic last?”
    I can feel you clawing at the bubble - desperately trying to rip away the shroud. It won't work.

    I stop you. I pause. I hold your hand. You look into the reflection in my eyes of my reflection in your eyes.

    The heat from the fire begins to melt the chains. Eyes Wide Open I can see them becoming thinner until there's nothing but liquid metal stains on my wrists. I smile again, more certain this time. You laugh. You lick my wrists and as you withdraw, smoke rises from your burning lips. The taste of metal replaces the sound of the flames.

    The taste endures and I let it. I don't know when the wincing will subdue, but here, now, it doesn't matter. I found you. You found me. I found me. Again. The burden is half as heavy and we crawl together.

    My submission for the Short Story Competion: http://www.thestudentroom.co.uk/show....php?t=3991411
    My word count says exactly 500 words
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    I fear that this may be confusing to some people. It is essentially about a struggle with depression and trauma. Whilst these may be considered mature themes, I don't think the content is strong enough to be deemed inappropriate. I used Plato's Theory of Forms as inspiration and there are references to Shakespeare's King Lear, Williams's A Streetcar Named Desire and Duffy's Rapture anthology. I wrote the first half in class after finishing a Philosophy essay early and the competition gave me a good excuse to finish it.
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    Very good read !! :excited: :jive:

    My favourite part :ahee: :
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    Wait. I’m not sure I want reality… what if I’m not ready? Why can’t the blunt magic last
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    (Original post by FrenchUnicorn)
    Very good read !! :excited: :jive:

    My favourite part :ahee: :
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    Wait. I’m not sure I want reality… what if I’m not ready? Why can’t the blunt magic last
    Thank you

    Lol I like that line too. Do you know the reference?
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    (Original post by IFoundWonderland)
    Thank you

    Lol I like that line too. Do you know the reference?
    I'm sorry to disappoint I don't ! But I'd be happy to know
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    Axel Johann had the brilliant idea of tagging people.

    Idk how to tag so will @ people who I think may be interested instead.

    Ethereal World CoolCavy Anon_98 z33 Hydeman
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    (Original post by IFoundWonderland)
    Axel Johann had the brilliant idea of tagging people.

    Idk how to tag so will @ people who I think may be interested instead.

    Ethereal World CoolCavy Anon_98 z33 Hydeman
    Awww honey i saw this just now <3 will reply properly but i rlly can't concentrate rn but i want to do it justice so will read it when i'm fully alert, ly :lovehug: x
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    (Original post by FrenchUnicorn)
    I'm sorry to disappoint I don't ! But I'd be happy to know
    There's a line in A Streetcar Named Desire where Blanche says "I don't want realism. I want magic." I kind of want to get that tattooed
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    (Original post by CoolCavy)
    Awww honey i saw this just now <3 will reply properly but i rlly can't concentrate rn but i want to do it justice so will read it when i'm fully alert, ly :lovehug: x
    Np, hope you aren't stressing too much Ilym :lovehug:
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    (Original post by IFoundWonderland)
    Axel Johann had the brilliant idea of tagging people.

    Idk how to tag so will @ people who I think may be interested instead.

    Ethereal World CoolCavy Anon_98 z33 Hydeman
    What you did there is mentioning,

    This is tagging, basically click that little tag next to the smiley button on the light blue top bar
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    Tfw you've been on TSR for two and a half years and didn't know this.

    I always wondered what that was for :rofl:
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    Tfw you realise your GCSE level entry doesn't stand a chance :lol:

    DAYM GURL this is amazing :eek: :cry2: its so ... beautiful *wipes tear*

    (Original post by IFoundWonderland)
    You look into the reflection in my eyes of my reflection in your eyes.
    *has a brain aneurysm*
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    (Original post by IFoundWonderland)
    There's a line in A Streetcar Named Desire where Blanche says "I don't want realism. I want magic." I kind of want to get that tattooed
    I looove this reference then :ahee: thanks for letting me know :five:
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    when you'll get your tattoo post a pic in the pic thread :ahee:
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    (Original post by IFoundWonderland)
    Tfw you've been on TSR for two and a half years and didn't know this.

    I always wondered what that was for :rofl:
    Omg wonderland this is awesome! You're so talented

    Love you xxx
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    I feel really sad after reading this.
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    (Original post by z33)
    Tfw you realise your GCSE level entry doesn't stand a chance :lol:

    DAYM GURL this is amazing :eek: :cry2: its so ... beautiful *wipes tear*

    *has a brain aneurysm*
    Haha, thanks, but shh. Yours was amazing :ahee:

    Lol it's that the person is being reunited with themselves and so what they're seeing is themself if thay makes sense?
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    (Original post by Ethereal World)
    Omg wonderland this is awesome! You're so talented

    Love you xxx
    Haha thanks so much love you too :hugs:

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    I feel really sad after reading this.
    That is not the intention
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    (Original post by IFoundWonderland)
    Haha thanks so much love you too :hugs:


    That is not the intention
    apart from the ending though that made smile

    :excited:
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    "you look into the reflection of my eyes of my reflection of your eyes" wow that is such a powerful quote.
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    (Original post by IFoundWonderland)
    Haha, thanks, but shh. Yours was amazing :ahee:

    Lol it's that the person is being reunited with themselves and so what they're seeing is themself if thay makes sense?
    np
    awhhhhhhhh yeah it's so sad :cry2: i love it!
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    What are these posts, they look really cool!
 
 
 
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