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    For school we've been asked to write a poem - i'm in year 8, and i don't know if my teacher will think something is wrong with me if i hand this in - a stupid but absolutely true worry.
    My poem:
    You wait.
    A memory, timed perfectly.
    Of that girl on the beach
    Or that old married couple.
    Frozen in time, you stare at us blankly.
    Offering no solutions
    When our lives fall apart
    We take comfort in you anyway.
    Thinking of that time we smiled at the camera
    Posed, and laughed at our faces
    It doesn’t matter
    You carry a place in our heart
    We’ll frame you
    Or carry you around in our pocket
    Glancing at you everyday
    Until 30 years later
    We’re sighing at society
    Tracing frozen shapes with our fingers
    Wondering how life goes so quickly
    How our past selves could be so mockingly cruel
    And we throw you across the rooms
    Sobbing at what could’ve been.
    Photograph.
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    *Is this too deep?
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    (Original post by xsana.khanx)
    *too
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    bro.
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    (Original post by Egirl127)
    For school we've been asked to write a poem - i'm in year 8, and i don't know if my teacher will think something is wrong with me if i hand this in - a stupid but absolutely true worry.
    My poem:
    You wait.
    A memory, timed perfectly.
    Of that girl on the beach
    Or that old married couple.
    Frozen in time, you stare at us blankly.
    Offering no solutions
    When our lives fall apart
    We take comfort in you anyway.
    Thinking of that time we smiled at the camera
    Posed, and laughed at our faces
    It doesn’t matter
    You carry a place in our heart
    We’ll frame you
    Or carry you around in our pocket
    Glancing at you everyday
    Until 30 years later
    We’re sighing at society
    Tracing frozen shapes with our fingers
    Wondering how life goes so quickly
    How our past selves could be so mockingly cruel
    And we throw you across the rooms
    Sobbing at what could’ve been.
    Photograph.
    I like it, it's really good!

    You should consider becoming a Poet or something in English. I hope your teacher likes it as I did and I wish the best for you in the future! You have such a bright future, good luck!
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    I'm not a huge fan of poems - they can be pretty cringy. But yours is alright (which means good, basically)
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    This is awesome!!! Sounds like you stole it from somebody , if you're only in year 8 you have talent!
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    Thanks everybody - this boosted my confidence!
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    (Original post by Egirl127)

    bro.
    I'm really sorry I just had to, I'm OCD about that kind of thing. I loved the poem though! x
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    No it's great, I love it!
 
 
 
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