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    Hi i am writing a book and i need feedback on my first draft, i'm going to post my first two chapters can someone check them?
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    This is the part.
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    I like it, good detail and I like the time it's set in and the character you've created. It needs a little work still, you used where instead of were early on and you might want to consider using more commas instead of full stops in the first paragraph.

    Other than that I think it's a great start and I look forward to reading the rest 😉

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    Ive published my book on kindle its called 'The salvation crop', do you know how i can make it popular?
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    Not much you can do really. I suggest advertising to friends and family. The more people who read it, the more popular it will become. I'll make sure to buy it myself but you need to give it plenty of time 😊 Congratulations
 
 
 
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