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"Although i realise university, like any other stage of life, will probably not be plain sailing, I am looking forward to finally being able to live the dream I have had for so many years, and to studying my favourite subject to such a high level."

(It's the first half of the last paragraph of my PS)
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(Original post by SiAnY)
"Although i realise university, like any other stage of life, will probably not be plain sailing, I am looking forward to finally being able to live the dream I have had for so many years, and to studying my favourite subject to such a high level."

(It's the first half of the last paragraph of my PS)
Nothing which jumps out at u as being special.........no good for a top uni
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"Although i realise university, like any other stage of life, will probably not be plain sailing
I wouldn't put this line in, personally. It could be perceived negatively i.e. as an admission of weakness. The comment also sounds a bit cliched, although I guess it can be difficult to avoid this on a PS.

Instead, I would try and sell yourself in a more upbeat way, 'I will relish the challenge', 'I am prepared to work hard to achieve an end product' - kind of a way.
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I wouldn't put this line in, personally. It could be perceived negatively i.e. as an admission of weakness. The comment also sounds a bit cliched, although I guess it can be difficult to avoid this on a PS.

Instead, I would try and sell yourself in a more upbeat way, 'I will relish the challenge', 'I am prepared to work hard to achieve an end product' - kind of a way.
Yeah i think that's my concern about it, the fact it is negative. Anyway, it's only a draft so it will not be appearing on my final statement now, i don't think. I like the 'relish the challenge' idea - thanks.
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