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    Abbreviated

    Have you
    Ever been at-ease
    In staunched release:
    That vain surcease:
    The tacit comma, or
    Absent pause, before
    A clause; defining
    Meter, without doors?

    Syntactically self-syncopated
    Caesura, all-but obviated
    (Irony: incorporated)

    A polysyllabic,
    Zero-sum, poetic
    Equilibrium?


    Me neither.
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    Glad to see you posting again.

    I like this, though your choice of title confuses me slightly.

    Edit: ah, you changed it. Much better.
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    Unless you want people to sit with a dictionary figuring out what the poem is about...well done !

    yet, if this wasn't your goal then perhaps the poem speaks to you..but it doesn't say anything to me.

    My opinion though
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    I am deeply dissatisfied with this piece: I only had to look up one word.

    For shame, Profesh. For shame.
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    (Original post by Peart)
    I am deeply dissatisfied with this piece: I only had to look up one word.

    For shame, Profesh. For shame.
    I felt the same!
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    very clever
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    I like.

    In fact, my favourite of your works, after "Vertigine", of course, which I found quite delightful.

    Becca <3.
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    I liked it
 
 
 
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