Is this a good draft personal statement (unfinished)

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    delete this NOW
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    hehe
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    Why are you posting your personal statement online?

    I recommend you delete this at once. If someone else copies some of this and submits their application before you, you would get caught for plagiarism.
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    Delete it now!!!!

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    Although you may seem smart, this is an incredibly dumb decision
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    (Original post by 16Characters....)
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    Thanks for notifying me. I've done my best, but it may already be too late.
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    (Original post by patrick_horro)
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    Posting your PS in a public forum allows it to be cached on Google and therefore flagged up as plagiarised by UCAS software. In addition, other people could copy it. Please don't post the next one you write, or you will have to start that one again, too.
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    It's too late mate you'll already be flagged for plagiarism. You'll have to start over.

    So you might as well repost it so I can see it because you've got nothing to lose now.
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    (Original post by Carnationlilyrose)
    Posting your PS in a public forum allows it to be cached on Google and therefore flagged up as plagiarised by UCAS software. In addition, other people could copy it. Please don't post the next one you write, or you will have to start that one again, too.
    Does it get cached instantly?
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    (Original post by DarkEnergy)
    Does it get cached instantly?
    That's not my sphere of expertise. You can tell by typing in a sentence and seeing if it comes up.
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    (Original post by patrick_horro)
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    Sorry - I didn't see this tag until now...

    Assume the damage is done.
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    If people have been told once they've been told a thousand times never ever share these things unless you don't intend to use it, albeit probably best if you still didnt. UCAS will kick you up and down the street if they suspect fibbing and copying.
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    As I was the retard who posted their own statement, if i still used it what would happen? lol
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    Can this thread be deleted already?
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    (Original post by patrick_horro)
    As I was the retard who posted their own statement, if i still used it what would happen? lol
    It would still be flagged. There is nothing to say that someone else couldn't have copied it and submitted it before you sent it in. Treat this as an opportunity to redraft it. First drafts are rarely worth keeping anyway.
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    I've just looked at Google's webcache, and unfortunately the whole Personal Statement is there. I'm not going to link it in order to limit the damage done (the more links something gets, the more prevalent it becomes), but it would be really advisable to start over so that you don't get flagged by the plagiarism checker.

    Some feedback on your personal statement from what I can see, however:
    • Run a spell-checker, and check your capitalisation - you've written "I" as "i" a couple of times.
    • Read your statement out loud, and check how it flows. Is that how you would normally speak? It seems quite fragmented.
    • Don't say "my interest in x is evident because..." - it's just wasted words as you obviously have an interest if you're applying for the course.
    You've got quite a good basis upon which to build, so think of this as an opportunity to start again and have another go at it - sometimes starting over can be easier than tweaking repeatedly!
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    turns out it was too long as well lol well I'm pretty mad inside
    (Original post by SummerStrawberry)
    I've just looked at Google's webcache, and unfortunately the whole Personal Statement is there. I'm not going to link it in order to limit the damage done (the more links something gets, the more prevalent it becomes), but it would be really advisable to start over so that you don't get flagged by the plagiarism checker.

    Some feedback on your personal statement from what I can see, however:
    • Run a spell-checker, and check your capitalisation - you've written "I" as "i" a couple of times.
    • Read your statement out loud, and check how it flows. Is that how you would normally speak? It seems quite fragmented.
    • Don't say "my interest in x is evident because..." - it's just wasted words as you obviously have an interest if you're applying for the course.
    You've got quite a good basis upon which to build, so think of this as an opportunity to start again and have another go at it - sometimes starting over can be easier than tweaking repeatedly!
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    also, how do I delete this whole forum thing
    (Original post by SummerStrawberry)
    I've just looked at Google's webcache, and unfortunately the whole Personal Statement is there. I'm not going to link it in order to limit the damage done (the more links something gets, the more prevalent it becomes), but it would be really advisable to start over so that you don't get flagged by the plagiarism checker.

    Some feedback on your personal statement from what I can see, however:
    • Run a spell-checker, and check your capitalisation - you've written "I" as "i" a couple of times.
    • Read your statement out loud, and check how it flows. Is that how you would normally speak? It seems quite fragmented.
    • Don't say "my interest in x is evident because..." - it's just wasted words as you obviously have an interest if you're applying for the course.
    You've got quite a good basis upon which to build, so think of this as an opportunity to start again and have another go at it - sometimes starting over can be easier than tweaking repeatedly!
 
 
 
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