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    So I got my first essay today and I really don't want to mess it up!
    The question is: 'The weak position of the Byzantine Empire by 1095 was a consequence of internal dynastic rivalry' Explain why you agree or disagree.
    Is there any form of template I could plan from? I think my introduction is also too waffly :/
    I've attempted a plan- what do you think?
    - Introduction
    - Why they was weak
    - Why dynastic rivalries caused this
    - Other factors
    - How dynastic overrule these factors
    - Intermediate Conclusion
    - Conclusion

    Help would be appreciated!!!
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    (Original post by TheNerdxP)
    So I got my first essay today and I really don't want to mess it up!
    The question is: 'The weak position of the Byzantine Empire by 1095 was a consequence of internal dynastic rivalry' Explain why you agree or disagree.
    Is there any form of template I could plan from? I think my introduction is also too waffly :/
    I've attempted a plan- what do you think?
    - Introduction
    - Why they was weak (the exam question already states that it was weak, it doesn't need to know more about the weakness)
    - Why dynastic rivalries caused this (good)
    - Other factors
    - How dynastic overrule these factors (your line of argument should be clear throughout)
    - Intermediate Conclusion
    - Conclusion (too many conclusions???)

    Help would be appreciated!!!
    This is a good plan, but its just a bit wordy - you don't have that much time in the exam.

    The general plan is normally like:
    Introduction (state both sides you will discuss, and then state which is stronger)
    Weaker side of the argument (3 points!)
    Reasons why these weren't important
    Stronger side (3 points!)
    Conclusion (no new information!
 
 
 
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