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    Hi guys, I am currently studying in Edinburgh and about to start looking for jobs. I am studying Software Engineering and would love a part time job in something techy like apple (idk if they do part time) or maplin etc. I have had previous job experience in mostly restaurants and would prefer to try something new. If you have any ideas on what kind of jobs I could apply for it would be greatly appreciated.
    I have attached a copy of my CV would be great if people could tell me what they think I could change and improve on . I have taken out the personal info in the CV.
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    It's pretty good. Just a few things I would say. Firstly it's too long. CVs should be maximum 2 sides. Even 1.5 sides is pushing it. The best CVs are around 1 side long, keep it short and simple. Cut down on the white space and perhaps make the font a bit smaller. Don't just have giant paragraph space for the sake of it. Also dont label your first paragraph "personal statement", it doesn't sound right. In all the jobs that you did, perhaps add a short sentence explaining the job a bit more or perhaps the skills you gained from it (interacting with customers etc.)

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    great thanks for the help, I will cut down on the white space and probably make the font smaller. Any idea what I should put instead of "Personal Statement"?
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    (Original post by jjmanowski)
    Hi guys, I am currently studying in Edinburgh and about to start looking for jobs. I am studying Software Engineering and would love a part time job in something techy like apple (idk if they do part time) or maplin etc. I have had previous job experience in mostly restaurants and would prefer to try something new. If you have any ideas on what kind of jobs I could apply for it would be greatly appreciated.
    I have attached a copy of my CV would be great if people could tell me what they think I could change and improve on . I have taken out the personal info in the CV.
    It looks good, could do with a few tweaks
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    (Original post by MuhammadDarcy)
    It looks good, could do with a few tweaks
    such as?
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    "Napier Edinburgh"?????
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    (Original post by jambojim97)
    "Napier Edinburgh"?????
    Whoops, fixed.
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    (Original post by jambojim97)
    "Napier Edinburgh"?????
    I didn't get that either
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    (Original post by MuhammadDarcy)
    I didn't get that either
    Just swap over the two words. The name of the uni is Edinburgh Napier.
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    (Original post by cbreef)
    Just swap over the two words. The name of the uni is Edinburgh Napier.
    ayy, fixed it to Edinburgh Napier University
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    (Original post by jjmanowski)
    ayy, fixed it to Edinburgh Napier University
    Cool
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    hey there,

    Looking good! Just a few points such as it's a bit long and the Napier thing (but that's already been pointed out)

    If you're looking for some more CV advice, these might be useful to you:
    http://advice.milkround.com/infograp...st-cv-mistakes
    http://advice.milkround.com/infographic-cv-questions
    http://advice.milkround.com/common-c...-to-avoid-them
    http://advice.milkround.com/how-to-g...d-by-employers
    http://advice.milkround.com/11-phrases-take-cv-now

    You should check out the Milkround jobs board for any jobs coming up in engineering/technology: http://www.milkround.com/jobs/
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    (Original post by jjmanowski)
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    I suggest you upload it in the CV Help forum. At the moment you are missing the key thing employers are looking for, evidence of relevant skills. You have some in your Interests section, but none in the key place, under your experiences. You seem to have plenty of activities that might produce good evidence, but employers aren't going to do the work for you
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    (Original post by jjmanowski)
    Hi guys, I am currently studying in Edinburgh and about to start looking for jobs. I am studying Software Engineering and would love a part time job in something techy like apple (idk if they do part time) or maplin etc. I have had previous job experience in mostly restaurants and would prefer to try something new. If you have any ideas on what kind of jobs I could apply for it would be greatly appreciated.
    I have attached a copy of my CV would be great if people could tell me what they think I could change and improve on . I have taken out the personal info in the CV.
    A lot of grammar mistakes like I done x don't you mean I did?
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    (Original post by jjmanowski)
    Hi guys, I am currently studying in Edinburgh and about to start looking for jobs. I am studying Software Engineering and would love a part time job in something techy like apple (idk if they do part time) or maplin etc. I have had previous job experience in mostly restaurants and would prefer to try something new. If you have any ideas on what kind of jobs I could apply for it would be greatly appreciated.
    I have attached a copy of my CV would be great if people could tell me what they think I could change and improve on . I have taken out the personal info in the CV.
    As others have said your CV is too long, I would say the interests section in particular can be cut down to maybe a couple of points, preferably relevant to the role, looking something like this (with generic examples)
    Interests
    Swimming, sailing

    Its also missing the examples of what you've done in each job, again keep them as relevant to each role you appply for as possible.

    Many of the statements in the personal profile are too vague, everyone says they are highly motivated, and good knowledge and experience of what? You need to sum up the knowledge and experience you have which is relevant to the role.

    I would suggest going to your university careers department for advice too, they should be able to know where you can consider applying too.
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    (Original post by jjmanowski)
    Hi guys, I am currently studying in Edinburgh and about to start looking for jobs. I am studying Software Engineering and would love a part time job in something techy like apple (idk if they do part time) or maplin etc. I have had previous job experience in mostly restaurants and would prefer to try something new. If you have any ideas on what kind of jobs I could apply for it would be greatly appreciated.
    I have attached a copy of my CV would be great if people could tell me what they think I could change and improve on . I have taken out the personal info in the CV.
    So, a technical role then? Let's see...

    1. Style is too plain, doesn't stand out for me.

    2. Didn't read your personal statement, just quickly skimmed through it and found nothing relevant to your passion in IT & Technology. There's no evidence of anything you claim either.

    3. Your employment history is the most important to me. It's good that you included dates, but unfortunately two of the roles overlap and there's just not enough details for me to go on. Were they part-time? Full-time? Where's the description for each one highlighting what you did (briefly) and learned as a result of these roles? What skillsets did you pick up? Why is there such a waste of valuable space? Unfortunately, this section has been a complete let-down and I'd much rather move on to the next CV.

    4. Ah, education - but unfortunately you've not formatted it well, it's just spaced out way too much and so you end up with more than two pages. At this stage in your life and given your level of experience, your CV should only be a maximum of 2 pages - with each section stood out easily for the recruiter. You've got pretty much all the right info in there, but not so good at presenting it. Sorry.

    5. Don't care about your interests, briefly skimmed through and again found no passion for the IT & Technology industry - except for the last sentence which covers some web design and development - but no evidence, links, portfolio etc. You could easily have turned this section into 'Technical Experience' or something and expanded on the latter.

    6. Could probably merge some of this into point 5 above. Perhaps convert the rest into training and certifications or something.

    7. References on request. Don't give them in your CV. Let the recruitment agencies take care of that for you, when you apply online on all the jobsites and make your profile public to recruiters.

    8. No reference to LinkedIn, portfolio, links, GitHub, projects etc. just underneath the contact details page 1, or elsewhere where relevant.

    I wouldn't hire you, sorry. With the above recommendations though, I'd perhaps get you hired into a trainee role in web dev depending on what you've done.

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    EDIT: Just wanted to point out that I don't mean to sound harsh or anything, it's simply constructive criticism based. I initially started out on my own with WordPress and custom CMS builds. I've gone through quite a few roles involving:

    - Backend API development on the LAMP stack.
    - Full-stack web developer, again LAMP with a custom MVC framework as a product (SaaS).
    - Web applications developer, involving mainly the Laravel framework and its variations, along with JS frameworks and libraries (AngularJS, Ractive.js, Vue.js, jQuery, Bootstrap) - full-stack again.
    - Full-stack web developer (mainly PHP) involving Zend and Symfony frameworks, and some others. Also support role.
    - DevOps and engineering roles covering pretty much anything including 3rd line support for businesses.

    Everything involved various tools. E.g. version control (Git, GitLab, BitBucket etc), Jira, Zendesk and other common ones you'd come across. Way too many to name, but I can pretty much get comfortable with anything these days. A MacBook Pro is my choice of kit, with a couple of monitors.

    Needless to say, I have a fair amount of experience with CVs for technical roles. I have several templates and know my way around with recruitment agencies for securing an interview... including how to prepare and what to say during the interviews themselves.
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    (Original post by Final Fantasy)
    So, a technical role then? Let's see...

    1. Style is too plain, doesn't stand out for me.

    2. Didn't read your personal statement, just quickly skimmed through it and found nothing relevant to your passion in IT & Technology. There's no evidence of anything you claim either.

    3. Your employment history is the most important to me. It's good that you included dates, but unfortunately two of the roles overlap and there's just not enough details for me to go on. Were they part-time? Full-time? Where's the description for each one highlighting what you did (briefly) and learned as a result of these roles? What skillsets did you pick up? Why is there such a waste of valuable space? Unfortunately, this section has been a complete let-down and I'd much rather move on to the next CV.

    4. Ah, education - but unfortunately you've not formatted it well, it's just spaced out way too much and so you end up with more than two pages. At this stage in your life and given your level of experience, your CV should only be a maximum of 2 pages - with each section stood out easily for the recruiter. You've got pretty much all the right info in there, but not so good at presenting it. Sorry.

    5. Don't care about your interests, briefly skimmed through and again found no passion for the IT & Technology industry - except for the last sentence which covers some web design and development - but no evidence, links, portfolio etc. You could easily have turned this section into 'Technical Experience' or something and expanded on the latter.

    6. Could probably merge some of this into point 5 above. Perhaps convert the rest into training and certifications or something.

    7. References on request. Don't give them in your CV. Let the recruitment agencies take care of that for you, when you apply online on all the jobsites and make your profile public to recruiters.

    8. No reference to LinkedIn, portfolio, links, GitHub, projects etc. just underneath the contact details page 1, or elsewhere where relevant.

    I wouldn't hire you, sorry. With the above recommendations though, I'd perhaps get you hired into a trainee role in web dev depending on what you've done.

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    EDIT: Just wanted to point out that I don't mean to sound harsh or anything, it's simply constructive criticism based. I initially started out on my own with WordPress and custom CMS builds. I've gone through quite a few roles involving:

    - Backend API development on the LAMP stack.
    - Full-stack web developer, again LAMP with a custom MVC framework as a product (SaaS).
    - Web applications developer, involving mainly the Laravel framework and its variations, along with JS frameworks and libraries (AngularJS, Ractive.js, Vue.js, jQuery, Bootstrap) - full-stack again.
    - Full-stack web developer (mainly PHP) involving Zend and Symfony frameworks, and some others. Also support role.
    - DevOps and engineering roles covering pretty much anything including 3rd line support for businesses.

    Everything involved various tools. E.g. version control (Git, GitLab, BitBucket etc), Jira, Zendesk and other common ones you'd come across. Way too many to name, but I can pretty much get comfortable with anything these days. A MacBook Pro is my choice of kit, with a couple of monitors.

    Needless to say, I have a fair amount of experience with CVs for technical roles. I have several templates and know my way around with recruitment agencies for securing an interview... including how to prepare and what to say during the interviews themselves.
    Nah man this is great, I know you aren't trying to sound harsh. Just remember this is just for a part time job aside my uni, so currently I don't have much (well none) work experience in the technology sector. I will edit my CV accordingly, thanks for the feed back, greatly appreciated!
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    I'm not familiar with Scottish education so may be wrong here, but your education should be in order with the most recent first (sorry if they already are!) Your A-levels (or equivalent) are much more important than GCSEs, so should go first. You don't need to list every grade, for GCSEs I just put x number of As (including maths and English), x number of B's etc, but to fit your personal qualifications. Higher qualifications can be put on the same line, e.g. A levels in Biology (A*), Maths (A) etc, again changing the details depending on your qualifications. The education section should only be around a third of the CV, even if you have little work experience, and is the main reason why your CV is too long.

    The rest has been said above basically - write what you did in each work role and what transferable skills you learnt that might be relevant to tech. I can't see it (but just skim-read), but have you put your software engineering study on it? If so, you can go into more detail with that e.g. particular modules relevant to tech.

    If you can, try to get some tech-related experience, even if it's just joining a society (which you can still put on your CV if you actually did something there).

    Interests are too long. Only needs to be a line or two. If you can, try and add something relevant to tech (e.g. 'taught myself to code with X language' or 'enjoy building websites' etc. I didn't even read the interests section, and I've got way more time than an employer would! Most your achievements can include just the title without a description. Take out the ones less relevant or impressive.

    I have a personal statement section at the top of my CV, so don't necessarily think it needs to go or be called something different as someone else suggested. Make sure its relevant to tech/the role you're applying to and not just generic. Basically, you should be able to tell by looking at a CV the kind of sector the person might apply for.
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    (Original post by jjmanowski)
    Hi guys, I am currently studying in Edinburgh and about to start looking for jobs. I am studying Software Engineering and would love a part time job in something techy like apple (idk if they do part time) or maplin etc. I have had previous job experience in mostly restaurants and would prefer to try something new. If you have any ideas on what kind of jobs I could apply for it would be greatly appreciated.
    I have attached a copy of my CV would be great if people could tell me what they think I could change and improve on . I have taken out the personal info in the CV.
    You won't get any jobs with that I'm afraid. You need a complete re-write. You need to give evidence of relevant skills. Look at it from the point of the Manager of the Apple store - which words on that CV give any evidence you know about Apple products, have an interest in technology, or have excellent customer service?
 
 
 
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