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    So I really am struggling with writing this essay and can't think of the right diagrams to put in or what to talk about. I know its a big ask but could someone show me how to answer it?
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    (Original post by coatsoft)
    So I really am struggling with writing this essay and can't think of the right diagrams to put in or what to talk about. I know its a big ask but could someone show me how to answer it?
    Okay I've just located the mark scheme. Before I look at it, I will try and use my own principles in answering these kinds of questions.

    The question says use both of these: the data in the extracts; your economic knowledge
    and the command is to assess the view that inequality is 'good for us all'.
    Apparently, assess is to "describe, evaluate and judge." (Source: http://www.thestudentroom.co.uk/showthread.php?t=551625)
    It's worth 25 marks.

    It seems natural that you just explain about things that support the view and to what extent they do and whether you agree or disagree with the assertions made, by using and comparing evidence (the data) and your own knowledge.

    Typically doing each of the above things in a single paragraph will give you 4-5 marks, this means you need at least 5-6 paragraphs.

    So I would start by underlining or otherwise highlighting the statements in the passages that don't support or do support the view.

    Then construct your thoughts using them. Don't paraphrase,use your own knowledge, your skills, the evidence and data, to assess how they link to the view.

    And once you've had a go, then look at the mark scheme.
    https://www.google.co.uk/search?q=%2...hrome&ie=UTF-8
    (my google search)
    http://filestore.aqa.org.uk/resource...-71361-SMS.PDF
    (the actual link)
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    So I finally properly answered the essay. Would anyone please be able to mark it for me? I am awful at marking my own and couldn't mark it with any accuracy.
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    (Original post by Kiritsugu)
    Okay I've just located the mark scheme. Before I look at it, I will try and use my own principles in answering these kinds of questions.

    The question says use both of these: the data in the extracts; your economic knowledge
    and the command is to assess the view that inequality is 'good for us all'.
    Apparently, assess is to "describe, evaluate and judge." (Source: http://www.thestudentroom.co.uk/showthread.php?t=551625)
    It's worth 25 marks.

    It seems natural that you just explain about things that support the view and to what extent they do and whether you agree or disagree with the assertions made, by using and comparing evidence (the data) and your own knowledge.

    Typically doing each of the above things in a single paragraph will give you 4-5 marks, this means you need at least 5-6 paragraphs.

    So I would start by underlining or otherwise highlighting the statements in the passages that don't support or do support the view.

    Then construct your thoughts using them. Don't paraphrase,use your own knowledge, your skills, the evidence and data, to assess how they link to the view.

    And once you've had a go, then look at the mark scheme.
    https://www.google.co.uk/search?q=%2...hrome&ie=UTF-8
    (my google search)
    http://filestore.aqa.org.uk/resource...-71361-SMS.PDF
    (the actual link)
    Thank you
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    more commas needed, almost died reading it i won't lie. If this is AQA 25 marker, you will not get more than 13 marks if you dont evaluate, i just briefly went over it i couldn't find an evaluation point at the end of a for point. Also lobbyist instead of lobby groups

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    So I finally properly answered the essay. Would anyone please be able to mark it for me? I am awful at marking my own and couldn't mark it with any accuracy.
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    (Original post by zainyyyyy)
    more commas needed, almost died reading it i won't lie. If this is AQA 25 marker, you will not get more than 13 marks if you dont evaluate, i just briefly went over it i couldn't find an evaluation point at the end of a for point. Also lobbyist instead of lobby groups
    Damn that doesn't surprise me. Thank you
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    also make a decision at the end, dont stand on the fence and dont include any points which you have not mentioned in the conclusion
    (Original post by coatsoft)
    Damn that doesn't surprise me. Thank you
 
 
 
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