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    Can you guys kindly have a quick look at my CV and let me know if I could make any improvements/changes. Please don't mind the blocked parts they're just personal details and addresses in my city etc. I'm basically an an I.T. grad lacking work experience and I'm mostly applying for IT sales/recruitment jobs. Any advice is much appreciated.

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    (Original post by EDUC4TION)
    Can you guys kindly have a quick look at my CV and let me know if I could make any improvements/changes. Please don't mind the blocked parts they're just personal details and addresses in my city etc. I'm basically an an I.T. grad lacking work experience and I'm mostly applying for IT sales/recruitment jobs. Any advice is much appreciated.

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    A few points I can think of at first glace. Your personal statement is too long and wishy washy. Cut out the 'from a young age' bit as that is too cliched. and give a brief overview of the skills you have gained from both your degree and work experience that will be relevant to the role. Tailor the personal statement to each role you apply for. You are also missing points outlining what you did in each role particularly where its relevant to what you are applying for (again you can tailor it to the role). You do have some work experience and even if it isn't IT based you clearly have some skills e.g. teamworking you just need to present examples as evidence.
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    From my perspective I'd agree that it's a very vague PS, and needs to be much shorter and to the point that will catch the attention of an employer.

    I'd have the degree and skills above employment, I'd also expect far more skills listed for a Masters IT graduate than basic SQL and office. What was your final project, did you learn comp languages etc.
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    Not good I'm afraid. The introduction is full of meaningless, generic fluff and buzzwords and you don't mention any of the skills you've learned other than Microsoft Office. If I were recruiting it'd go straight in the bin.
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    Profile is too waffly and doesn't really say anything. And what is a 'profile' anyway?

    Note: it's 'GCSEs', not 'GCSE's': it's a plural, not a possessive.
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    (Original post by EDUC4TION)
    Can you guys kindly have a quick look at my CV and let me know if I could make any improvements/changes. Please don't mind the blocked parts they're just personal details and addresses in my city etc. I'm basically an an I.T. grad lacking work experience and I'm mostly applying for IT sales/recruitment jobs. Any advice is much appreciated.

    Thank you!
    Sorry if its harsh but I got to agree with ChaosKass. You don't have lots of content in there, very little information is really there. Try to mention more stuff, you played football or whatever, some stuff that really developed you. Small things like bullet points would be nice, will make it easier to read. Add reference at the bottom.
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    (Original post by EDUC4TION)
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    You should make it 2 pages long and add more information using bullet points c:
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    I very much appreciate all the honest and direct advise. I'm going to consider everything and make some changes to the CV. Thank you all.
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    What do you guys think of this slightly updated personal statement? I tried to link specific skills to my degrees and work experience. Cheers.

    "I am a highly motivated I.T. graduate, having gained many personal and technical skills throughout my Undergraduate and Master’s degree. I have lead several module projects at University which have greatly increased my confidence levels, leadership, time management and teamwork skills. The work experience I’ve gained have also increased my communication, problem solving and customer support skills. With the opportunity given, I am eager to demonstrate the skills and knowledge I’ve gained from my education and work experience in a professional sales orientated role that I hold a deep interest in."
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    (Original post by EDUC4TION)
    The work experience I’ve gained have also increased my communication, problem solving and customer support skills. With the opportunity given"
    Say HOW those skills have been gained through your work experience..what tasks did you do to achieve those skills?
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    (Original post by EDUC4TION)
    What do you guys think of this slightly updated personal statement? I tried to link specific skills to my degrees and work experience. Cheers.

    "I am a highly motivated I.T. graduate, having gained many personal and technical skills throughout my Undergraduate and Master’s degree. I have lead several module projects at University which have greatly increased my confidence levels, leadership, time management and teamwork skills. The work experience I’ve gained have also increased my communication, problem solving and customer support skills. With the opportunity given, I am eager to demonstrate the skills and knowledge I’ve gained from my education and work experience in a professional sales orientated role that I hold a deep interest in."
    There is no place for a personal statement in a CV, they are completely different things. You aren't really telling the employer anything very useful at all in this CV, you certainly aren't giving enough evidence of relevant skills to be competitive at the moment.

    You need to take a break from actually trying to write a CV and start by looking at job adverts and compiling a list of skills employers are looking for - in the case of IT that will be 2 lists, soft skills and technical skills.

    Then you need to work out what evidence you have of having those skills. If you can't do that, then you need to rethink the job you are applying for, or work out how to get more experience outside a paid job. Assuming you can find evidence, once you have 20+ bullet points, you can begin to construct them into a CV.

    Otherwise, all you have at the moment is 4 lines of education.
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    you need a cover letter and more info, expand and explain
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    (Original post by EDUC4TION)
    What do you guys think of this slightly updated personal statement? I tried to link specific skills to my degrees and work experience. Cheers.

    "I am a highly motivated I.T. graduate, having gained many personal and technical skills throughout my Undergraduate and Master’s degree. I have lead several module projects at University which have greatly increased my confidence levels, leadership, time management and teamwork skills. The work experience I’ve gained have also increased my communication, problem solving and customer support skills. With the opportunity given, I am eager to demonstrate the skills and knowledge I’ve gained from my education and work experience in a professional sales orientated role that I hold a deep interest in."
    Still far too long. Such a statement should be no more than 3-4 short sentences (yours are really verbose). It is also far too vague - it could apply to pretty much any job application - it should be unique and tailored to each job you're applying to.

    It should focus on what you want in a career/job or what you are looking for, with no more than 2 key reasons why you are suitable.

    If you are applying with a cover letter then a personal statement is completely redundant and shouldn't be used at all.

    And it is led rather than lead. You should also be consistent in how you write - you flit between I have and I've.


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    I am getting mixed answers here, Is it better to keep the personal statement short and concise or make it longer and explain how I developed each skill?

    Below is some further changes to the whole CV but I haven't yet outlined how I attained each individual skill.

    I am a highly motivated I.T. graduate, having gained many personal and technical skills throughout my Undergraduateand Master’s degree. I have lead several module projects at University whichhave increased my confidence levels, leadership, presentation, time management andteamwork skills. The work experience I’ve gained have developed mycommunication, problem solving and customer support skills.

    Education

    (MSc)Master’s Degree in Information Technology (Pending)
    Modules included: Software Development, Project Management,User Experience, Information & Knowledge Management and Contemporary Issues

    (BSc)Bachelor's Degree in Information Technology (2:2)

    A-Levels: Information Technology, English Language(C) & Business Studies (Merit)

    GCSEs:5 GCSE’s at C grade including English Language, Maths, Information Technology & Science BTEC.

    Technical Skills
    SQL
    Java
    HTML
    Interface Design
    Microsoft Office
    - Excel
    - Access
    - Word
    - PowerPoint

    Work Experience

    July,2013: Next - (Sales Assistant, Temporary)
    This role included serving customers and working in a small team in the stockroom during a busy summer season.

    July-Sep,2014: Teleperformance – (HMPO Customer Advisor)
    In this role, I worked in a call centre answering customer queries, complaints and providing specialised advice regarding all aspects of UK passports, as well as using a knowledge base system.

    References are available on request.
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    (Original post by EDUC4TION)
    I am getting mixed answers here, Is it better to keep the personal statement short and concise or make it longer and explain how I developed each skill?
    The problem with yours is that it doesn't do either. It's really generic and full of typical cliches. There's nothing unique to it for it to be useful to a recruiter. It is either full of detail I could easily read in other sections or full of statements that mean very little without more specific evidence.

    And you will get mixed answers. Personal statements are like marmite - some people hate them, others think they are great.

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    (Original post by EDUC4TION)
    I am getting mixed answers here, Is it better to keep the personal statement short and concise or make it longer and explain how I developed each skill?

    Below is some further changes to the whole CV but I haven't yet outlined how I attained each individual skill.

    I am a highly motivated I.T. graduate, having gained many personal and technical skills throughout my Undergraduateand Master’s degree. I have lead several module projects at University whichhave increased my confidence levels, leadership, presentation, time management andteamwork skills. The work experience I’ve gained have developed mycommunication, problem solving and customer support skills.

    Education(MSc)Master’s Degree in Information Technology (Pending)
    Modules included: Software Development, Project Management,User Experience, Information & Knowledge Management and Contemporary Issues

    (BSc)Bachelor's Degree in Information Technology (2:2)

    A-Levels: Information Technology, English Language(C) & Business Studies (Merit)

    GCSEs:5 GCSE’s at C grade including English Language, Maths, Information Technology & Science BTEC.

    Technical Skills
    SQL
    Java
    HTML
    Interface Design
    Microsoft Office
    - Excel
    - Access
    - Word
    - PowerPoint

    Work Experience

    July,2013: Next - (Sales Assistant, Temporary)
    This role included serving customers and working in a small team in the stockroom during a busy summer season.

    July-Sep,2014: Teleperformance – (HMPO Customer Advisor)
    In this role, I worked in a call centre answering customer queries, complaints and providing specialised advice regarding all aspects of UK passports, as well as using a knowledge base system.

    References are available on request.
    Ok - honestly this needs a lot of work. It lacks detail in important places and is too verbose in others.

    Feel free to send me a link to a word doc or PDF version in a PM and I'll give you specific feedback. Seeing it as free text like you have posted isn't really useful.


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    (Original post by EDUC4TION)
    I am getting mixed answers here, Is it better to keep the personal statement short and concise or make it longer and explain how I developed each skill?
    Either:

    keep it short - as mentioned before, it should be no more than 3-4 sentences and should make the employer want to continue reading. For example, if you think you're well qualified, mention that in your PS, make the employer want to keep reading or they can decide simply from looking at your personal statement that your CV is going in the bin. All I got from there was, you've done a Masters and an Undergraduate and you want to work in IT. Shouldn't be there. You should be explaining your education in the education section, and erasing the fact you want to work in IT, it's obvious you do, otherwise why are you applying...?

    Or don't include one at all, and include that kind of thing in your cover letter. It has no place in a CV. Also you should be explaining how you developed each skill when talking about what you did to develop this skill. Keep everything nice and tidy and easy to follow.
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    Don't just include a list of like 10 skills, it sounds very generic and like you haven't made an effort. It's worse than listing fewer skills because the employer will assume that you don't have any, or only have any to a weak extent Pick 3-4 top skills and use them only. 2-3 sentences is a good size for the personal statement. Say what kind of work you're looking for as well.
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    I am getting mixed answers here, Is it better to keep the personal statement short and concise or make it longer and explain how I developed each skill?

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    There is a specific, private CV Help forum on TSR
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    Ok thanks all for the suggestions, I'll make further changes and ask some friends to review it as well. I just want the best possible CV as I haven't had too much luck so far.

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    There is a specific, private CV Help forum on TSR
    Could you direct me to this forum please? Would be much appreciated.
 
 
 
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