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Describe an occasion when you received disappointing news. Include the thoughts and feelings of those involved.
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Reckless turmoil crashed as thick waves against my chest then fell as large black diamond shaped crystal daggers,like fresh patient snow they fell, proud of their loved season, greeting the morning to the night ever so slowly, too slowly. Then their waists twisted and formed what i saw to be the most ferocious black dragon with the largest canines sharpened with experience roaring out of its foaming mouth and its scarred lips, its beaming red eyes were so powerful it took my concentration away from its body to them, to the evil that lurked in them and spewed forth their ugly red liquid on its nose then dribbled to its foamy lips. I grasped their intentions faster than lightning with the heaviest thud that pounced on my chest, they were searching out for my heart and they found it. Its body coiled around my heart till it could only suck a breath per minute.
Grandma could not be dead, but she was and her wrecked but beautiful soul was dragged by the only thing attaching itself to the clear blue sky empty of its white deformed eyes. Her souls thread, all have soul thread but the sky chooses when to take its young ling or as we like call it in our family (its prey). Who knows how tattered and beaten up her soul must by now, under the dominance of the sky. I prayed to the 20 000 Gods i knew and maybe conjured to satisfy my peace less mind
I suffered what most called depression and withdrawal symptoms. But i was lurking a deadly path in my mind, i thought of the sweet experiments i could test on my golden skin. I drew the thickest and largest flow of blood from my arm and thought i could offer the Gods to take me away, and i did offer. With folded legs, lifted arms a bent head and tightly shut eyes i began to sing songs with words i knew i did not know. I praised all types of Sun gods to the ruler of the sky Zeus,i could bear the pain no longer.
'Grandma' i said to my spirit to send to her'i cannot stay on Earth any longer i will come to join there in the suffering it is better there than here, we both detested Earth and said we would stay with each other for ever. I'm coming, please tell the gods to accept me'
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