Why do personal statements sound soo cheesy...?!
Anyone got any great tips?
or where I can find example statements?
Every other sentence seems to start with an 'I' - really hate to keep using the personal pronoun... adds to the cheesyness!
Agreed - try to stay away from the I this and I that. Don't try to enhance it by using language that is un necessary. Keep to the point as much as possible. If there's a specific course that you're interested in, make reference to aspects of the course (such as a specific module that you know about) in the statement.
My personal statement didn't really have much in it: why I wanted to do the course I was applying for (Comp Sci), computer related stuff I'd done (programming), things I enjoyed in my A Level subjects and a bit about work experience. It didn't take up all of the space given either, about half I think.
When I wrote mine, we were told to write approximately half about the subject you're going to do (why you want to do it etc), and the other half about personal achievements and interests. Personally, I began mine saying why Psychology (Chemistry, Medicine, English etc etc) intrested me in general terms, rather than specific course reference, and rounded off at the end with reference to the beginning. I like that better because it kept the P.S. as a complete unit, rather than just a list of "I did this" and "I did that". Do it however it suits you though, originality is good (since the admissions officers will be reading them in their thousands) but keep it to a style that reflects your strengths (ie if you sound better writing formally, don't write it as a chatty letter!). You'll know you've done it right when you actually start being impressed with yourself! hehe
Anyone want to write my personal statement for me? I cant do it, i have been trying and trying and i cant get it right i am not going to uni, i am going to colllege but i still need a personal statment, i want to do a childcare course, diploma in childcare and education level 3!