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    Ill attach it below, the question is on how Stevenson presents setting
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    Ill attach it below, the question is on how Stevenson presents setting
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    Ill attach it below, the question is on how Stevenson presents setting
    I'm no english teacher or academic but personally i dont think its that good of an essay; at most i would give you a grade 5. The essay is quite monotonous and repetitive, for example you keep on using the phrase' This [demonstrates] that..'. Moreover, the actually analysis is too structured and weak with no examples of an alternative interpretation. Also when embedding your quotes it seems like your forcing it because usally when you embed quotes its meant to read as a normal sentence which makes sense but yours dosen't.

    However, you did include context and attempted to analyse specific words in the quote you pick, but you should also aim to analyse the impact on the reader. On the whole the essay is quite basic and rigid with no perceptive explanations or points.
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    I would overall give you a grade 5 (possibly low 6)
    Positives
    - Mentioning of language devices
    - Covered Context on novel
    - focused response on specific words
    You are capping you mark because you need to include the following to achieve high marks:
    - mention the effect on reader, both the perspectives 19th century and modern reader.
    - explain explicitly what you mean when you state a point e.g 'first fog' you said suggested the fog is hiding something from us but there was no explanation why, because of this it it difficult to understand what you mean.
    - give alternative ideas to the ones you have mentioned e.g. what else could the 'fog' possibly represent
    -mention more language devices where possible
    -analyse structure of text also ( grade 8-9 skill when done well)
    I hope my advice was useful to you.
 
 
 

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