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    Through the incorporation of techniques such as simile, metaphor and personification, each poet is able to provide a different insight on their personal interpretation and reaction to death, loss and suffering, ultimately evoking sympathy within readers, as well as imparting a lesson on value and acceptance.

    Is there any other way I can say the same thing or split it into two sentences? Help would greatly be appreciated!
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    Through the incorporation of literary techniques such as similes, metaphors and personification, each poet is able to provide a different insight on their personal interpretation and reaction to death, loss and suffering. This ultimately evokes sympathy with the reader, as well as imparting a lesson on value and acceptance.
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    (Original post by nancy1105)
    The sentence is:

    Through the incorporation of techniques such as simile, metaphor and personification, each poet is able to provide a different insight on their personal interpretation and reaction to death, loss and suffering, ultimately evoking sympathy within readers, as well as imparting a lesson on value and acceptance.

    Is there any other way I can say the same thing or split it into two sentences? Help would greatly be appreciated!
    It is rather long. You could put a full stop after suffering and start a new sentence This ultimately evokes ....

    Sentence length has no fixed rules, but about 15 word sentences carry a lot of impact, but are less flowing to read. Sentences of 30 or more words tend to become more difficult to read as the beginning of the sentence is lost before the end is reached. If sentences are getting to 30 words or more, they usually need splitting if you want the reader to stay engaged (save for deeply academic papers etc).
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    (Original post by threeportdrift)
    It is rather long. You could put a full stop after suffering and start a new sentence This ultimately evokes ....

    Sentence length has no fixed rules, but about 15 word sentences carry a lot of impact, but are less flowing to read. Sentences of 30 or more words tend to become more difficult to read as the beginning of the sentence is lost before the end is reached. If sentences are getting to 30 words or more, they usually need splitting if you want the reader to stay engaged (save for deeply academic papers etc).
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    (Original post by whowannadate)
    Through the incorporation of literary techniques such as similes, metaphors and personification, each poet is able to provide a different insight on their personal interpretation and reaction to death, loss and suffering. This ultimately evokes sympathy with the reader, as well as imparting a lesson on value and acceptance.
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    (Original post by nancy1105)
    The sentence is:

    Through the incorporation of techniques such as simile, metaphor and personification, each poet is able to provide a different insight on their personal interpretation and reaction to death, loss and suffering, ultimately evoking sympathy within readers, as well as imparting a lesson on value and acceptance.

    Is there any other way I can say the same thing or split it into two sentences? Help would greatly be appreciated!
    Could split it:

    By incorporating techniques such as simile, metaphor and personification, each poet is able to provide a different insight on their personal interpretation and reaction to death, loss and suffering. Ultimately, this invokes sympathy within readers, as well as imparting a lesson on value and acceptance.

    Or:

    Through the use of simile, metaphor and personification, each poet provides a different insight on their personal reaction to death, loss and suffering. This, ultimately, invokes sympathy within readers, while also imparting a lesson on value and acceptance.
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    (Original post by nancy1105)
    Thank you!!
    Np, nice sentence btw
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    (Original post by LostInPanda)
    Could split it:

    By incorporating techniques such as simile, metaphor and personification, each poet is able to provide a different insight on their personal interpretation and reaction to death, loss and suffering. Ultimately, this invokes sympathy within readers, as well as imparting a lesson on value and acceptance.

    Or:

    Through the use of simile, metaphor and personification, each poet provides a different insight on their personal reaction to death, loss and suffering. This, ultimately, invokes sympathy within readers, while also imparting a lesson on value and acceptance.
    Thank youu
 
 
 
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