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    I have tried to do a paragrapgh this german question and I was wondering if you could check them to see if they are correct. I usually get a grade B in them and sometimes an A, I would really like an A or maybe even an A*. Sometimes the problem with my paragraphs is the flow of the question response.
    My school can put in more recycling bins especially in the canteen in addition to this my school could turn their food waste into mixed fertilizers instead of just putting it in the bin in order to help the environment. The students should refill plastic bottles rather then throw them away or the school can ensure that both sides of every paper is written on in order to reduce the number of papers thrown away.
    What can your school do to help the environment?
    Meine Schule kann in mehr Wiederverwendungssortierfächern besonders in der Kantine zusätzlich zu dieser meiner Schule stellen konnte ihre Nahrungsmittelvergeudung in Mischdünger verwandeln, anstatt es gerade im Sortierfach zu setzen, um der Umwelt zu helfen Die Studenten sollen sich wieder füllen Plastikflaschen werfen sie eher dann weg, oder die Schule kann sicherstellen, dass beide Seiten jedes Papiersgeschrieben werden über, um die Zahl von weggeworfenen Papieren zu reduzieren.
    Please just take a look and see if this is correct and can you tell me of anything wrong or maybe redo one or two sentences because they are really bad-thanks
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    Maybe for a better flowing response, you could try the following:

    In meiner Schule könnte es noch mehr Wiederverwendungssortierfächern geben, besonders in der Kantine. Außerdem könnte meine Schule den Lebensmittelabfall an Mischdünger verwandeln, anstatt es direkt im Sortierfach zu werfen, um die Umwelt zu helfen. Meiner Meinung nach, sollten die Schüler auch ihre Plastikwasserflaschen nicht weg werfen, und, statt dessen sollten sie die Wasserflaschen nachfüllen. Vielleicht könnte die Schule sich sicherstellen, dass es auf beiden Seiten jedes Blattes Papier geschrieben wird, um die Menge von weggeworfenem Papier zu reduzieren.


    P.S: My grammar isn't great as I used to live in Germany until I was nearly 7 but obviously learnt English since and my grammar's become worse!
 
 
 
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