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    I have tried to do a paragrapgh this german question and I was wondering if you could check them to see if they are correct. I usually get a grade B in them and sometimes an A, I would really like an A or maybe even an A*. Sometimes the problem with my paragraphs is the flow of the question response.
    My school can put in more recycling bins especially in the canteen in addition to this my school could turn their food waste into mixed fertilizers instead of just putting it in the bin in order to help the environment. The students should refill plastic bottles rather then throw them away or the school can ensure that both sides of every paper is written on in order to reduce the number of papers thrown away.
    What can your school do to help the environment?
    Meine Schule kann in mehr Wiederverwendungssortierfächern besonders in der Kantine zusätzlich zu dieser meiner Schule stellen konnte ihre Nahrungsmittelvergeudung in Mischdünger verwandeln, anstatt es gerade im Sortierfach zu setzen, um der Umwelt zu helfen Die Studenten sollen sich wieder füllen Plastikflaschen werfen sie eher dann weg, oder die Schule kann sicherstellen, dass beide Seiten jedes Papiersgeschrieben werden über, um die Zahl von weggeworfenen Papieren zu reduzieren.
    Please just take a look and see if this is correct and can you tell me of anything wrong or maybe redo one or two sentences because they are really bad-thanks
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    I didn't look through the grammar, but it doesn't sound very fluent. It seems like you're just forcing lots of sentence structures. I would say you should bring up less points about what your school can do, and just focus on them properly. Maybe say like two points, but go into detail eg. My school can put in more recycling bins espcially in the canteen, because right now students have no place to recycle their rubbish. Recyling rubbish is very important because it helps the environment and means we don't have to fill up landfill. At home, I always try to recycle my rubbish as much possible.

    Do you see what I'm trying to say?
 
 
 
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