Unseen poetry 2017 aqa eng lit paper 2

OP

Original post by ECDL BAE

excellent analysis !!!

Thank you so much!!

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Sanjith Hegde123

18

Original post by alixwfoster

Unseen was pretty hard.... but here's some ideas that I mentioned in my answer...

Well, For autumn I described how the personnification of the season causes pretty bleak consequences, also personnification of the "branches shaking"... suggests that the season evokes fear in nature? Enjambment in it also creates a fast pace, and so reflects how the season is capable of transitioning the natural landscape into something quite menacing... "glows red" etc...

For the 'Today' poem, enjambment was also used, but to create a gentle and peaceful tone to the poem due to the slow pace that it carried, also caesura contributed pauses and so could mirror how the speaker takes joy at experiencing this season. This contrasts to the negative attitude that the speaker holds in 'Autumn' who through use of words in the semantic field of theft, e.g robber and accomplice, holds a strong view that the season can cause unwanted surroundings.

I didn't go into so much detail
I did use personification, I also spoke about violent imagery "quiet rage" and the repetition of theft
But your analysis seems the best I've seen, good work

Reply 4

ECDL BAE

9

talke

Original post by alixwfoster

Unseen was pretty hard.... but here's some ideas that I mentioned in my answer...

Well, For autumn I described how the personnification of the season causes pretty bleak consequences, also personnification of the "branches shaking"... suggests that the season evokes fear in nature? Enjambment in it also creates a fast pace, and so reflects how the season is capable of transitioning the natural landscape into something quite menacing... "glows red" etc...

For the 'Today' poem, enjambment was also used, but to create a gentle and peaceful tone to the poem due to the slow pace that it carried, also caesura contributed pauses and so could mirror how the speaker takes joy at experiencing this season. This contrasts to the negative attitude that the speaker holds in 'Autumn' who through use of words in the semantic field of theft, e.g robber and accomplice, holds a strong view that the season can cause unwanted surroundings.

i talked about simile ( i think it was a simile-cant remember the poem properly) when the writer talks about "experience robber". potraying autumn in a negative way, makes it come across as an enemy, something bad and evil just like a "robber". the poet couldnt espress how much he hated this season so he decided to do it through this poetic device. the poet also implies that autumn is a season that we should be scared of and never look foward to as we would never look foward to an "experienced" robbery. the word "autumn" in the title is on its own which represents lonliness and how depressing autumn can be as during autumn all the leaves fall of the tree and they abandon the tree making it feel lonely as it is without its leaves . The writer talks about the "green" stuff and "colourful distractions" (i believed he was talking about the leaves) refering to the leaves in autumn changing colour. the word "green" creates a sense of positivity. the writer is refering to the beauty of nature before autumn arrives "grabbing" all the good things away and leaving us with all the negative things in nature. the write talks about the weather in autumn. the continuous repetition of the word "wind " shows how much he hates the weather as he find s it difficult to deal with it etc... i then talked about "branches shaking " and "air of chaos".

Reply 5

OP

Original post by Sanjith Hegde123

I didn't go into so much detail
I did use personification, I also spoke about violent imagery "quiet rage" and the repetition of theft
But your analysis seems the best I've seen, good work

Thanks a lot! The repetition of theft I didn't pick up on and so that is a really good analysis point.

Reply 6

OP

Original post by ECDL BAE

talke

i talked about simile ( i think it was a simile-cant remember the poem properly) when the writer talks about "experience robber". potraying autumn in a negative way, makes it come across as an enemy, something bad and evil just like a "robber". the poet couldnt espress how much he hated this season so he decided to do it through this poetic device. the poet also implies that autumn is a season that we should be scared of and never look foward to as we would never look foward to an "experienced" robbery. the word "autumn" in the title is on its own which represents lonliness and how depressing autumn can be as during autumn all the leaves fall of the tree and they abandon the tree making it feel lonely as it is without its leaves . The writer talks about the "green" stuff and "colourful distractions" (i believed he was talking about the leaves) refering to the leaves in autumn changing colour. the word "green" creates a sense of positivity. the writer is refering to the beauty of nature before autumn arrives "grabbing" all the good things away and leaving us with all the negative things in nature. the write talks about the weather in autumn. the continuous repetition of the word "wind " shows how much he hates the weather as he find s it difficult to deal with it etc... i then talked about "branches shaking " and "air of chaos".

This is fantastic... probably got around 23/24!

Reply 7

ECDL BAE

9

Original post by alixwfoster

This is fantastic... probably got around 23/24!

aww...thanks. you dont know how much i appreciate your comment. i hope so too! i hope yu get an amazing grade too.

Reply 8

Sanjith Hegde123

18

Guys, to all of you worrying to what your wrote compared to what you should of wrote compared to what others wrote...

Don't worry, as long as you included techniques, picked out individual words and tried to analyse in detail, you should all be fine with getting a good mark, OP was obviously worried because probably his mates had wrote something different, don't worry, you aren't the examiner and neither are they, and plus.. It's the new GCSE, grade boundaries are only going to be low.

Reply 9

....Username.

I didn't even realise there was a 24 mark poetry question I thought it was just the 8 mark comparison. I only realised when there was 15 mins left😭😭I didn't even get to try to do the 8 mark

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OP

Original post by ....Username.

I didn't even realise there was a 24 mark poetry question I thought it was just the 8 mark comparison. I only realised when there was 15 mins left😭😭I didn't even get to try to do the 8 mark

Oh well it does't matter, at least you did the 24 marker!

Reply 11

Sanjith Hegde123

18

I also spoke about perspective in the unseen poem, where Today was about making *you* the reader, feel uplifting and joyful, whereas Autumn was mainly describing what Autumn itself does...

Reply 12

....Username.

Original post by alixwfoster

Oh well it does't matter, at least you did the 24 marker!

Yh but I ended up doing like 6 paragraphs for the 24 mark all literally just 3 lines long :frown:

no analysis or proper explanation

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OP

Original post by ....Username.

Yh but I ended up doing like 6 paragraphs for the 24 mark all literally just 3 lines long :frown:

no analysis or proper explanation

Don't worry at ALL about it. What's done is done, and quality is better than quantity, trust me. I wrote two-thirds of a page once and got 22/24 for unseen, and my mate wrote 3 pages and got 14 marks! In the summer, I sure that you will be surprised with what you got! It will be great.

Reply 14

I found unseen really difficult to be honest; anyone mind telling me if the points I put were any good? I think I wrote something like this:
Poem begins with an abrupt, snappy title - 'Autumn arrives'. This immediately reflects just how rapidly and abruptly Autumn replaces the Summer's vitality with its dull sense of monotony.
The use of enjambment could, I said, be employed for a couple of reasons. Again, it gives the poem a breathless quality and could reflect the speed at which Autumn takes over the Summer. However, an alternative interpretation is that the enjambment, and the fact that there is one long sprawling verse, is used as a deliberate contrast to the caesura used when speaking about the wind - suggesting that the Autumn (represented by Caesura) slows down the emotion and excitement felt during the summer (represented by enjambment, etc).
I think I talked about personification as well - with the extended metaphor of the Autumn as a robber further presenting it in a pessimistic light and creates a sense of injustice. Words such as 'Grabbing' also have negative connotations.
The frequent use of noticeably conflicting words such as 'placid' with 'rage' and 'careful' with 'chaos', etc creates a sense of confusion and ambiguity - demonstrates how Autumn brings with it a sense of uncertainty and fear, further reinforced by the personification of the branches 'shaking'. Personification also used with the sky's 'quiet rage' to further reinforce the adverse effects of Autumn on its surroundings and how it disturbs the peace and natural tranquility of summer. The sky also 'glows red' - the colour 'red' is generally used to symbolise anger.

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Reply 15

I found unseen really difficult to be honest; anyone mind telling me if the points I put were any good? I think I wrote something like this:
Poem begins with an abrupt, snappy title - 'Autumn arrives'. This immediately reflects just how rapidly and abruptly Autumn replaces the Summer's vitality with its dull sense of monotony.
The use of enjambment could, I said, be employed for a couple of reasons. Again, it gives the poem a breathless quality and could reflect the speed at which Autumn takes over the Summer. However, an alternative interpretation is that the enjambment, and the fact that there is one long sprawling verse, is used as a deliberate contrast to the caesura used when speaking about the wind - suggesting that the Autumn (represented by Caesura) slows down the emotion and excitement felt during the summer (represented by enjambment, etc).
I think I talked about personification as well - with the extended metaphor of the Autumn as a robber further presenting it in a pessimistic light and creates a sense of injustice. Words such as 'Grabbing' also have negative connotations.
The frequent use of noticeably conflicting words such as 'placid' with 'rage' and 'careful' with 'chaos', etc creates a sense of confusion and ambiguity - demonstrates how Autumn brings with it a sense of uncertainty and fear, further reinforced by the personification of the branches 'shaking'. Personification also used with the sky's 'quiet rage' to further reinforce the adverse effects of Autumn on its surroundings and how it disturbs the peace and natural tranquility of summer. The sky also 'glows red' - the colour 'red' is generally used to symbolise anger.

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Sorry accidentally posted twice!

Reply 17

OP

Original post by cricinfo

Sorry accidentally posted twice!

Aha it's okay! I think that you points are very good... like REALLY GOOD. I really think that you could get top, top marks no joke cause even when typing, you seem WAYYY beyond GCSE standard?!
(better than mine anyways)

Reply 18

Thanks so much - that comment genuinely means so much to me. I hope you get a really good grade and I am sure you'll have done much better than you think. Best of luck :smile:

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OP