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‘Homework has no value. Some students get it done for them; some don’t do it at all. Students should be relaxing in their free time.’
Write an article for a broadsheet newspaper in which you explain your point of view on this statement.

It is time to banish homework for primary school children?
Studies show that there is little or no correlation between whether children and younger teens do homework and a sufficient measure of achievement. In the words of one UK education expert: "Most small children and early adolescents have not yet developed the self-reflection and self-monitoring skills to get the benefit of either homework or self-study." Isn't it time we questioned why hours and hours of a young person's week is taken up by something few enjoy and which, it seems, doesn't even enhance their education?
Homework carries anxiety and stress, it leaves children to spend very little time to spend with family and friends and eats away at their leisure time. It can sometimes make children actively less enthusiastic about learning because it is forced upon them and it closes their minds and timetables in such a way that makes them less creative. People often say that that young people should seize the advantage of a youthful mind while they have one and develop their imagination as the Nobel peace prize winning scientist Albert Einstein said ‘Imagination is more important than knowledge. Knowledge is limited. Imagination encircles the world’.
According to Sir Ken Robinson who is an expert in learning and children’s education, ‘imagination is the source of all human achievement‘, thus one of the key components of creativity and innovation. Creativity and problem solving are among the basic skills that everyone is required to have, whether they have to deal with an everyday problem at home or a work related challenge. But to think outside the box and come up with innovative ideas, we need to use our imagination and see things beyond reality.
Which of these two scenarios sound compelling to you? It is a bright sunny day, the sky was a soft shade of blue, dotted with feathery white clouds as the rays of the sun penetrate through the window and into the room in which you contain copying down from Wikipedia about some famous Artist where nothing is stimulating your learning and your brain is not processing the information or going on a school trip to an Art gallery where you can see various artists pieces which will enhance your observation and analysis skills through encounters with visual art.
Teachers may argue that it creates an independent work ethic and that success at and beyond school requires students to get used to problem solving and persevering without support from their teachers further also increasing their research skills but I believe that these skills are better taught and developed at a later age as children should embrace their imagination and creativity while they have it through leisure activities such as sport and art rather than stressing over homework due in Monday morning at 9am.
The little proven positive impact homework has on someone's life is outweighed by the negative impact and has a lot less meaning in a student's education that many people may think. I would like to see a world where children and adolescents are happy and appreciate the precious period of youth.
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1) you need to break it up a bit more into paragraphs and sentences (full stops and commas are your friends)
2) maybe start with your own opinion because this kinda just read as lots of writing on other people's opinion and then no followup or exploration or your own opinion on their opinion
3) it does feel a bit disjointed maybe add some sentences that lead from one paragraph into the next

otherwise it seems pretty good
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(Original post by roshanroy_7)
‘Homework has no value. Some students get it done for them; some don’t do it at all. Students should be relaxing in their free time.’
Write an article for a broadsheet newspaper in which you explain your point of view on this statement.

It is time to banish homework for primary school children?
Studies show that there is little or no correlation between whether children and younger teens do homework and a sufficient measure of achievement. In the words of one UK education expert: "Most small children and early adolescents have not yet developed the self-reflection and self-monitoring skills to get the benefit of either homework or self-study." Isn't it time we questioned why hours and hours of a young person's week is taken up by something few enjoy and which, it seems, doesn't even enhance their education?
Homework carries anxiety and stress, it leaves children to spend very little time to spend with family and friends and eats away at their leisure time. It can sometimes make children actively less enthusiastic about learning because it is forced upon them and it closes their minds and timetables in such a way that makes them less creative. People often say that that young people should seize the advantage of a youthful mind while they have one and develop their imagination as the Nobel peace prize winning scientist Albert Einstein said ‘Imagination is more important than knowledge. Knowledge is limited. Imagination encircles the world’.
According to Sir Ken Robinson who is an expert in learning and children’s education, ‘imagination is the source of all human achievement‘, thus one of the key components of creativity and innovation. Creativity and problem solving are among the basic skills that everyone is required to have, whether they have to deal with an everyday problem at home or a work related challenge. But to think outside the box and come up with innovative ideas, we need to use our imagination and see things beyond reality.
Which of these two scenarios sound compelling to you? It is a bright sunny day, the sky was a soft shade of blue, dotted with feathery white clouds as the rays of the sun penetrate through the window and into the room in which you contain copying down from Wikipedia about some famous Artist where nothing is stimulating your learning and your brain is not processing the information or going on a school trip to an Art gallery where you can see various artists pieces which will enhance your observation and analysis skills through encounters with visual art.
Teachers may argue that it creates an independent work ethic and that success at and beyond school requires students to get used to problem solving and persevering without support from their teachers further also increasing their research skills but I believe that these skills are better taught and developed at a later age as children should embrace their imagination and creativity while they have it through leisure activities such as sport and art rather than stressing over homework due in Monday morning at 9am.
The little proven positive impact homework has on someone's life is outweighed by the negative impact and has a lot less meaning in a student's education that many people may think. I would like to see a world where children and adolescents are happy and appreciate the precious period of youth.
I really wanna roast you rn
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(Original post by roshanroy_7)
‘Homework has no value. Some students get it done for them; some don’t do it at all. Students should be relaxing in their free time.’
Write an article for a broadsheet newspaper in which you explain your point of view on this statement.

It is time to banish homework for primary school children?
Studies show that there is little or no correlation between whether children and younger teens do homework and a sufficient measure of achievement. In the words of one UK education expert: "Most small children and early adolescents have not yet developed the self-reflection and self-monitoring skills to get the benefit of either homework or self-study." Isn't it time we questioned why hours and hours of a young person's week is taken up by something few enjoy and which, it seems, doesn't even enhance their education?
Homework carries anxiety and stress, it leaves children to spend very little time to spend with family and friends and eats away at their leisure time. It can sometimes make children actively less enthusiastic about learning because it is forced upon them and it closes their minds and timetables in such a way that makes them less creative. People often say that that young people should seize the advantage of a youthful mind while they have one and develop their imagination as the Nobel peace prize winning scientist Albert Einstein said ‘Imagination is more important than knowledge. Knowledge is limited. Imagination encircles the world’.
According to Sir Ken Robinson who is an expert in learning and children’s education, ‘imagination is the source of all human achievement‘, thus one of the key components of creativity and innovation. Creativity and problem solving are among the basic skills that everyone is required to have, whether they have to deal with an everyday problem at home or a work related challenge. But to think outside the box and come up with innovative ideas, we need to use our imagination and see things beyond reality.
Which of these two scenarios sound compelling to you? It is a bright sunny day, the sky was a soft shade of blue, dotted with feathery white clouds as the rays of the sun penetrate through the window and into the room in which you contain copying down from Wikipedia about some famous Artist where nothing is stimulating your learning and your brain is not processing the information or going on a school trip to an Art gallery where you can see various artists pieces which will enhance your observation and analysis skills through encounters with visual art.
Teachers may argue that it creates an independent work ethic and that success at and beyond school requires students to get used to problem solving and persevering without support from their teachers further also increasing their research skills but I believe that these skills are better taught and developed at a later age as children should embrace their imagination and creativity while they have it through leisure activities such as sport and art rather than stressing over homework due in Monday morning at 9am.
The little proven positive impact homework has on someone's life is outweighed by the negative impact and has a lot less meaning in a student's education that many people may think. I would like to see a world where children and adolescents are happy and appreciate the precious period of youth.
Lol better luck next time
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