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    Eyes bore holes in the grainy wood
    of my splintered spirit,
    The foundation of the matter tingling
    slightly,
    but not enormously,
    as something so earthen and barren
    was disgusted by any advances.

    I turned to look upon the side of the bar,
    No candles or wine glasses were laid,
    Just eyes upon eyes upon eyes
    Dispersing me, immersing me,
    into the planks that lined the floor.

    I was eternally nothing in the eyes of
    'men'
    but to myself a dead and broken remnant
    of a wild tree, hacked down,
    never to breathe a sigh again.
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    That is amazing... profound... i really like the vivid imagery that is concocted up... i especially like the ending
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    thank god i don't do English Lit anymore
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    Err..so we shouldn't cut down trees to use for building materials we should undertand they are living sentient beings??
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    Wow...that's intense. Great stuff.
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    Obviously it doesn't compare to your's, and I'm not good at poetry, but here's a little concoction of mine - just wanted to know how it is:

    Sable bistre dust embraced the frothy white - Satiating creation of aromatic splendour.

    Brawls, clashes, wars and The fight,
    If for a moment, out the door.

    The sour sweetness set soul and palette right,
    Suppressed was the schism by a fleeting yearning for more.
 
 
 
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