Omg - My Personal Statement!!

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I just read a few threads and now I reasile I totally forgot about my personal statement and how crap it is going to sound....

I have had an interest in music since I was 5 and can play three instuments, the piano, the clarinet and the violin. I am not a member of orchesters unless you count my school one which to date has 4 members including myself. I totally detest playing the violin and don't really know why I'm still playing it etc etc

oh this is going to be fun....

where do I start?

Reply 1

Dr. Blazed

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a_musical_gal

where do I start?

"I have been fascinated with music ever since..."

:wink:

Reply 2

musicbloke

17

What books have you read? What periods are you interested in? How have your A-levels enhanced that interest? Why do you want to spend 3 years studying music? etc...

I can have a look over it once you have a draft if you want.

MB

Reply 3

AllergicToFairydust

OP

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How is this for my opening line? Pretty Not Original, is it?

I would like to study Music to expand my knowledge of my interest which explores my creativity as well as being something I passionately enjoy.

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I just reasiled something. I'm find it so hard to describe my passion for the works of Handel and modern film writers such as John Williams and Klaus Badelt because I can't translate my heart into words and that is what I love about Music is allows me to express my feelings through the only way my musical brain can through my own music which I create.

if only the unis could let that be my personal statement.

Reply 4

~Sam~

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a_musical_gal

How is this for my opening line? Pretty Not Original, is it?

I would like to study Music to expand my knowledge of my interest which explores my creativity as well as being something I passionately enjoy.

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I just reasiled something. I'm find it so hard to describe my passion for the works of Handel and modern film writers such as John Williams and Klaus Badelt because I can't translate my heart into words and that is what I love about Music is allows me to express my feelings through the only way my musical brain can through my own music which I create.

if only the unis could let that be my personal statement.

There's no reason why you can't include the last bit of that, it sounds really good and from the heart!

Reply 5

musicbloke

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a_musical_gal

How is this for my opening line? Pretty Not Original, is it?

I would like to study Music to expand my knowledge of my interest which explores my creativity as well as being something I passionately enjoy.

I like it but it seems ever so slightly anti-intellectual if you know what I mean.
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a_musical_gal

I just reasiled something. I'm find it so hard to describe my passion for the works of Handel and modern film writers such as John Williams and Klaus Badelt because I can't translate my heart into words and that is what I love about Music is allows me to express my feelings through the only way my musical brain can through my own music which I create.

if only the unis could let that be my personal statement.

I can see what you want to say but it is not really musicologically valid. Since the rise in reception aesthetics in the sixties the idea of musical expression has not existed in the way you want (except for the odd exceptions like Vladimir Jankelevich who I personally think is a bit of a bullsh*t merchant). If you want to talk about handel and modern film composers, why don't you talk about the nature of opera seria and how it produced its dramatic effect and then link this in. Of course I am not arguing that music is emotionless (or that would be taking the wrong thing out of what schenkerians try and put forward) but it does not put across objective emotions unless it is entirely conservative, and possibly leading to the inartistic.

MB

Reply 6

AllergicToFairydust

OP

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Ok, I'll work out a basic ps and post it on here once I have written it.

Reply 7

AllergicToFairydust

OP

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Invisible

Superb idea, that way nobody can use or copy parts from your PS for their own PS.

I said the basic PS - I'm not stupid enough to post the final draft!

Reply 8

undiscovered

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a_musical_gal

Ok, I'll work out a basic ps and post it on here once I have written it.

You may also like to try this -->Personal Statement Reviews on Studential.

Reply 9

AllergicToFairydust

OP

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SiAnY

You may also like to try this -->Personal Statement Reviews on Studential.

Thanks.

My basic plan is -

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Say why I want to music firstly (because it is a major part of my life.)

Say why I want to a BA in Music rather than a BMus

Link my coursework to an interest in certain romantic period music (all my courses have some sort of romantic in them)

Mention my interested in composing and books I have read to develop my composing skills

Mention the fascination with Film Music

Mention what I like about playing three instuments and what I like playing on them

Mention that I won the school's music award (??? is that in the right place or is there another area on the form - I thought it showed deep interest)

Say I am a prefect and have a part time job

Sum up what I want to do after uni

What do you think?

Reply 10

musicbloke

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a_musical_gal

Say why I want to a BA in Music rather than a BMus

There isn't a difference. It depends on the individual intitutions although you might be talking about the difference between an academic course and a performance course.

MB

Reply 11

dieeiervonsatan

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a_musical_gal

I would like to study Music to expand my knowledge of my interest which explores my creativity as well as being something I passionately enjoy.

Don't mean to sound rude.. but that sentence makes no sense to me at all. :confused:

Is it just me?

Reply 12

Ben.S.

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dieeiervonsatan

Don't mean to sound rude.. but that sentence makes no sense to me at all. :confused:

Is it just me?

It's not just you - cram in the hyperbole! That particular sentence doesn't read very well.

Ben

Reply 13

AllergicToFairydust

OP

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Which is a better opening? A or B. I wrote both of these but one at home and the other at school.

A - My parents favourite

Performing has being a major part of my life via the piano and the violin since a young age. As a result it was an obvious choice to study at A level. During my course, I have developed a deep interest in of all kinds of music and styles. I feel that my course has given me a strong basis to go on the University and develop my knowledge of my most favourite areas of music.

B - My friends favourite

Music has been an interest from a young age when I began playing to piano. However, since I have began my AS course, I believe my interest in music has escalated into an obsession. I have not only gained interests in the topics included in my course but from topics outside of my course including music for films in partially the works of John Williams.
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Reply 14

Lord

However, since I have began my AS course

This doesn't sound right...

Maybe Since I began my AS course

or

Since my AS course began....

Reply 15

AllergicToFairydust

OP

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Lord

This doesn't sound right...

Maybe Since I began my AS course

or

Since my AS course began....

Point noted...what is your favourite though?

Reply 16

sadia_rehman

personally i think that the second one is better... the wording to the first one is not that good, whereas the 2nd one has a bit more affect

Reply 17

ChemistBoy

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replace 'obsession' with 'passion' I think.

Reply 18

AllergicToFairydust

OP

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ChemistBoy

replace 'obsession' with 'passion' I think.

I understand your point but I really really like obsession....I'll leave it in and see what my teacher says...she has my first draft (with 2nd opening) which I worked on all night and morning.

Reply 19

hihihihi

Dr. Blazed

"I have been fascinated with music ever since..."

:wink:

That's a boring start imo.

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