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    Extract: The Great Mouse Plot by Roald Dahl







    In this extract the writer uses language to a present the sweet shop owner as a horrible, detestable person. The owner is described as a “green gooseberry”. The word green colour symbolises and brings to mind bitterness, which she is. A gooseberry is also sour the use of adjective represents her personality as unkind and without a simile compare the character to anything the sour. Also the word choice of the word sour can be compared to how a sweet is sour and how she works in a sweet shop, so the word choice is well thought through in this text. When the two words are together it forms an alliteration, this emphasises the meaning of both words and overall presents the sweet shop owner as an unlikeable person.
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    I remember reading this exact passage last year, brings back memories.

    Your point seems to be good, like how you compared sour and sweet, but it doesn't quite flow, I had to read it multiple times to see what you were saying.
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    7/8 I’d say

    You’re picking out really great points and, although I do agree with the above ^^, I don’t think flow is a huge deal for the low mark comprehension questions! I personally got an 8 for my English Lang so I’m not the best at advising hence why I wouldn’t want to tell you it’s a firm 8/8😅
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    Thanks for the feedback, could you give me a solid grade pls
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    I think you need to understand the fact that you need to explain how the specific quotes affect the entire text. You are making great points but there is no explanation. I do however agree that since it is an 8 mar question, not a lot of detail is required but do use correct terminology. Don't just say word, say adjective e.g. when describing the colour green. It's the small thing like these which are crucial to attaining top marks without writing loads.

    In my view, I would give you 4-5/8. Improving your answer can boost your marks.
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    3/8 You need to analyse the quotes further and don't use the words:'word' or 'quote'. These are boring. Also try to use CHRIS RICE words such as emphasise or illustrates etc.
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    (Original post by TheFlash2024)
    Extract: The Great Mouse Plot by Roald Dahl







    In this extract the writer uses language to a present the sweet shop owner as a horrible, detestable person. The owner is described as a “green gooseberry”. The word green colour symbolises and brings to mind bitterness, which she is. A gooseberry is also sour the use of adjective represents her personality as unkind and without a simile compare the character to anything the sour. Also the word choice of the word sour can be compared to how a sweet is sour and how she works in a sweet shop, so the word choice is well thought through in this text. When the two words are together it forms an alliteration, this emphasises the meaning of both words and overall presents the sweet shop owner an unlikeable person.
    I would give it a 4/8. It's at a good level for this point in the year but it's not very perceptive. Also, don't use "the word" in your piece. It's much better to say "the adjective green" as it points out to the examiner that you know the word type. Furthermore, I like your idea about the colour green and how it symbolises bitterness. That is good but I think that comparing it to how a sweet is sour and that she works in a sweet shop is quite weak and unnecessary. Plus use more subject terminology. Well done though for linking it back to the question in your end. Perhaps also add an alternative analysis.
    Good luck.
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    Thank you, appreciated. Will work on identifying the techniques.
 
 
 
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