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    Quick question, would it be okay if I start my personal statement with some stats like the depression rates and then use it as my motive to study that course?
    It's just that I'm unsure if using statistics or something that bleak would be suitable as a sentence opener or not.
    (also side-question, would it also be fine if I say something about the underfunding and inadequate state of the mental health service in my personal statement as well? It's just that I'm unsure if that would be considered inappropriate...)
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    (Original post by Future-Barista)
    Quick question, would it be okay if I start my personal statement with some stats like the depression rates and then use it as my motive to study that course?
    It's just that I'm unsure if using statistics or something that bleak would be suitable as a sentence opener or not.
    (also side-question, would it also be fine if I say something about the underfunding and inadequate state of the mental health service in my personal statement as well? It's just that I'm unsure if that would be considered inappropriate...)
    Don't know about the first one since I'm not an expert.

    For the Mental Health I'd say be very careful about the tone you go with. You don't want to come across as angry with the world.:nah: Saying something about the strain that the service is under might be a better way around it than getting political about funding.

    Should probably point out I'm not a MH expert either, or very experienced on personal statements.
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    (Original post by Future-Barista)
    Quick question, would it be okay if I start my personal statement with some stats like the depression rates and then use it as my motive to study that course?
    It's just that I'm unsure if using statistics or something that bleak would be suitable as a sentence opener or not.
    (also side-question, would it also be fine if I say something about the underfunding and inadequate state of the mental health service in my personal statement as well? It's just that I'm unsure if that would be considered inappropriate...)
    You can but don't use too much space talking about rates and quoting things. Admissions officers are more interested in why you want to study the course and what your academic/specific interests are.
 
 
 
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