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    Hey guys, I’m writing a piece of creative writing for my English class (Year 10 English Language) and I’m struggling how to pro long my writing. I’m not really sure what to write about next. The basic plot is Miss Havisham from Great Expectations. This is my writing so far.

    As my eyes began searching around the empty hallways, I couldn’t help but notice one specific door. The way it appeared fascinated me. It was like a wall, barricading its self off from the outside world. Every single, microscopic grain of wood stared at me. Nervously, I began twiddling my thumbs like I was having some sort of awkward conversation with my parents.

    The decayed door knob was coated in a thick, red layer of rust. It felt like sand paper, as I brushed my knuckles on it. A frequent flow of dead cold air howled as it slithered through the gap between the door and the rotting floor boards.

    - What do you think I should go onto next? (I don’t quite want to open the door yet, maybe another paper graph before it opens)

    - I plan to have Miss Havisham in the shadows which Pip will notice after exploring most of the room.

    - Any ideas?

    - Daisy Dobson, Kidderminster.
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    Nice use of details - but keep the momentum going all the time.

    "The cold air felt full of death, howling in the space between the rotting floorboards and the door"

    Imagine every sentence as having a purpose - leading towards your point. What point are you making? If you're thinking of filling the silence with filler, if you know what I mean - don't. Go ahead and get to it. Be selective and artsy with description.

    I personally would go ahead and open the door quite early, and describe the room etc before seeing Havisham in the corner of it, in the shadows like you said, nice idea.
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    Thank you! I’ll add this is now!
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