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    Hey so I;m in year 10 and honestly do struggle with creating sophisticated yet concise answers. I wrote this essay on How Mrs Birlings character is presented in the play, it took me an hour and half lol.
    Could you please tell me what grade you would give this, what I did well and (most importantly) how I can improve it, Thanks!

    How has Priestley Presented Mrs Birling in An Inspector Calls?

    I have attached it as it was too long to post aha.
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    (Original post by gabriellaxx.x)
    Hey so I;m in year 10 and honestly do struggle with creating sophisticated yet concise answers. I wrote this essay on How Mrs Birlings character is presented in the play, it took me an hour and half lol.
    Could you please tell me what grade you would give this, what I did well and (most importantly) how I can improve it, Thanks!

    How has Priestley Presented Mrs Birling in An Inspector Calls?

    I have attached it as it was too long to post aha.
    Thank you

    Hi there, it's a bit more than just representing "typical upper-class women". Along with Mr Birling, she represents the attitudes of the time (capitalism). Remember, to get a more marks and a high grade you have to link in context somewhere, so a mention of what it was like at the time is sufficient.

    I'd say overall you have a good balance though (I'm no expert though).

    I'm assuming the grammatical errors are due to rushing?
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    (Original post by EdexcelAreIdiots)
    Hi there, it's a bit more than just representing "typical upper-class women". Along with Mr Birling, she represents the attitudes of the time (capitalism). Remember, to get a more marks and a high grade you have to link in context somewhere, so a mention of what it was like at the time is sufficient.

    I'd say overall you have a good balance though (I'm no expert though).

    I'm assuming the grammatical errors are due to rushing?
    Thank you so much. I originally wrote this on paper, so I typed all out again (quite quickly) so I didn't really consider grammar. Thank you for the feedback, I'll take it on board
 
 
 
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