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    Hi everyone,

    I'm applying for MA Philosophy as a mature student and I'm wondering if my personal statement could be TOO personal (is there such a thing?)
    I started Philosophy A level many years ago and initially applied for a BA. However, I was in a terrible situation with my abusive family at the time, with both parents having mental health issues and toxic behaviour (determined to destroy anything good around them). I got As at the end of my first year and I didn't sit my final exams as they were dragging me into their whirlwind of chaos and unfortunately I was seriously depressed and in a bad way.
    So, now the good news - I am now estranged from them and once I sorted myself out, I did an Open University degree and got a first. A big motivator for me is reclaiming important things I had lost and this is one of those things. Should I include this history on my personal statement? I know they want a personal statement to be personal so do you think this is inspiring/ I'm playing the victim/ inappropriate... trying to find a better way to rephrase it!

    Many thanks
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    Include it by all means but only briefly mention details, instead write about how it has developed you and made you better now (I.e more motivated, independent or w/e)
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    Include it by all means but only briefly mention details, instead write about how it has developed you and made you better now (I.e more motivated, independent or w/e)
    Yes obviously - I don't want to harp on about the past but I want to explain what motivates me! Thanks
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    That kind of thing should be in the reference rather than in a personal statement, and also they're not going to look at your A levels, only your degree record, so it's irrelevant anyway.
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    (Original post by pink*fairy)
    Hi everyone,

    I'm applying for MA Philosophy as a mature student and I'm wondering if my personal statement could be TOO personal (is there such a thing?)
    I started Philosophy A level many years ago and initially applied for a BA. However, I was in a terrible situation with my abusive family at the time, with both parents having mental health issues and toxic behaviour (determined to destroy anything good around them). I got As at the end of my first year and I didn't sit my final exams as they were dragging me into their whirlwind of chaos and unfortunately I was seriously depressed and in a bad way.
    So, now the good news - I am now estranged from them and once I sorted myself out, I did an Open University degree and got a first. A big motivator for me is reclaiming important things I had lost and this is one of those things. Should I include this history on my personal statement? I know they want a personal statement to be personal so do you think this is inspiring/ I'm playing the victim/ inappropriate... trying to find a better way to rephrase it!

    Many thanks
    Maybe get someone to write about your previous extenuating circumstances in your reference? Probably a better to place to write it.
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    That kind of thing should be in the reference rather than in a personal statement, and also they're not going to look at your A levels, only your degree record, so it's irrelevant anyway.
    Yes, true - I will try writing my personal statement a few times and sleep on it, I could probably not include it at all as I have a lot to say already. The reason I thought to include it at all is that it's the truth and I'm returning to the subject after 20 years so they will naturally wonder why! Oh well, a few drafts later and I'll work it out!
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    (Original post by pink*fairy)
    Hi everyone,

    I'm applying for MA Philosophy as a mature student and I'm wondering if my personal statement could be TOO personal (is there such a thing?)
    I started Philosophy A level many years ago and initially applied for a BA. However, I was in a terrible situation with my abusive family at the time, with both parents having mental health issues and toxic behaviour (determined to destroy anything good around them). I got As at the end of my first year and I didn't sit my final exams as they were dragging me into their whirlwind of chaos and unfortunately I was seriously depressed and in a bad way.
    So, now the good news - I am now estranged from them and once I sorted myself out, I did an Open University degree and got a first. A big motivator for me is reclaiming important things I had lost and this is one of those things. Should I include this history on my personal statement? I know they want a personal statement to be personal so do you think this is inspiring/ I'm playing the victim/ inappropriate... trying to find a better way to rephrase it!

    Many thanks
    Ideally, it might not be best if you only include this, which I understand that you already know. Speak more on the lines of your academic achievements and how your experiences have helped you strive for you. Include your work experience if any and also explain why coming back to doing this is important of you and how it is going to help you in the future. If you cover all this you should be good.
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    I think focus more on your academic achievements, extra and super curriculars etc, volunteering, work experience. Mentioning too much about personal lives takes away from the already minimal amount of characters you have to discuss your achievements! However, speak to your tutors and see what they suggest as they know you personally.
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    Personally, I would ask someone to explain that in your reference because that gives you more space to talk about your achievements etc. They'll still understand the circumstances around your studies and view your achievements with those in mind.
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    Thanks everyone - I've done some editing and worked it out. Yes - I emphasised my achievements, specific interests and aptitude... as it's PG level I've heard it's rare to get rejections and I have a strong application without it,

    Thanks again!
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    (Original post by pink*fairy)
    Thanks everyone - I've done some editing and worked it out. Yes - I emphasised my achievements, specific interests and aptitude... as it's PG level I've heard it's rare to get rejections and I have a strong application without it,

    Thanks again!
    Good luck. Let me know how it goes x
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