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    Applying for Finance and accounting.
    I've looked at so many examples of personal statements and they use amazing terminology, have fab introductions and in overall are just a piece of art.
    comparing it to my personal statement makes it seem soo basic and simple.
    I've shown it to my head of sixth form and he says it's good.
    but..I keep prolonging it, because I'm scared it won't be good enough for my uni's, especially Birmingham and Southampton.
    Idk where I'm going with this haha...
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    (Original post by Lia22)
    Applying for Finance and accounting.
    I've looked at so many examples of personal statements and they use amazing terminology, have fab introductions and in overall are just a piece of art.
    comparing it to my personal statement makes it seem soo basic and simple.
    I've shown it to my head of sixth form and he says it's good.
    but..I keep prolonging it, because I'm scared it won't be good enough for my uni's, especially Birmingham and Southampton.
    Idk where I'm going with this haha...
    First of all, don't be scared. Fancy terminology is not a good indication of whether someone is right for the course. It's not about showing off what you know, it's about demonstrating that you are the right person for the course, and that you are committed and know what you're heading into. That you're going to work hard for a course that you want to do and aren't going to drop out after 3 weeks.:yep:
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    (Original post by Lia22)
    Applying for Finance and accounting.
    I've looked at so many examples of personal statements and they use amazing terminology, have fab introductions and in overall are just a piece of art.
    comparing it to my personal statement makes it seem soo basic and simple.
    I've shown it to my head of sixth form and he says it's good.
    but..I keep prolonging it, because I'm scared it won't be good enough for my uni's, especially Birmingham and Southampton.
    Idk where I'm going with this haha...
    Hi Lia22 :hello:

    Many universities will not be looking for fancy terminology as it is not an indication of the skills you have. It is often obvious when someone uses terminology to just make it sound better when structurally it does not make sense.

    If you have any work experience you can expand on and demonstrate what skills you have learnt from it this would be far more beneficial. Also add anything you think may relate to the subject area you are applying for.

    If you have any questions I am happy to help, just give me a shout. Please remember not to post any part of your personal statement on any forums.

    Hope this helps

    Ruth
 
 
 
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