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Recently I handed in an essay to a teacher and I think it got an undeservedly low mark. Please could you read this and think what you would give it out of 25. Thank you
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1JoD5e2rMYplKzf3nrDLIFQAnBo7twSnznmC-9WKs6bc/edit?usp=sharing
Original post by james_furber1
Recently I handed in an essay to a teacher and I think it got an undeservedly low mark. Please could you read this and think what you would give it out of 25. Thank you
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1JoD5e2rMYplKzf3nrDLIFQAnBo7twSnznmC-9WKs6bc/edit?usp=sharing


https://www.thestudentroom.co.uk/showthread.php?t=4005981
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Original post by james_furber1
Recently I handed in an essay to a teacher and I think it got an undeservedly low mark. Please could you read this and think what you would give it out of 25. Thank you
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1JoD5e2rMYplKzf3nrDLIFQAnBo7twSnznmC-9WKs6bc/edit?usp=sharing


What mark did you get? It seems like you are stating facts and fully arguing your point.
Original post by Airmed
What mark did you get? It seems like you are stating facts and fully arguing your point.

I got 13/25 !?
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Original post by james_furber1
I got 13/25 !?


Sorry, typo *not arguing your point. Which is probably why you have scored that.
Original post by Airmed
Sorry, typo *not arguing your point. Which is probably why you have scored that.

In what way? This is not the same criticism the teacher gave me either.
Original post by james_furber1
Recently I handed in an essay to a teacher and I think it got an undeservedly low mark. Please could you read this and think what you would give it out of 25. Thank you
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1JoD5e2rMYplKzf3nrDLIFQAnBo7twSnznmC-9WKs6bc/edit?usp=sharing


It's a great essay and infact i recently finished this topic but you need to talk about why TOV was a big problem for the weimar republic. You have mentioned some great points for other problems of germany in 1919 but you neeed to answer the question by including why the TOV was a big problem as well as the other multitude of problems. I had the same kind of problem, believe me but just do what i mentioned above.
I'm with @Airmed... Too narrative, with not enough analysis and no real judgement. Missing key elements while including other content of questionable relevance. Poor grammar.
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this was amazing I would give you 24/25

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