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Hi there, what do you think of my opening paragraph? Any tips on how I could improve or how I could analyse these quotes in depth?

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STATEMENT:“Many of the characters in these tales are symbolic or are symbols: they represent aspects of human nature or society”
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Many of the characters in The Bloody Chamber symbolise strength and some symbolise weakness. Some of Carter’s female characters are able to represent aspects of human nature. For example, the female characters learn to control their lives from men who seek to control them, while others must change themselves, even their species in one case. For example, in “The Erl-King”, the young girl resolves to “take two huge handfuls of his rustling hair as he lies half dreaming… wind them into ropes…very softly” and shall “strangle him with them”.
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(Original post by z_o_e)
Hi there, what do you think of my opening paragraph? Any tips on how I could improve or how I could analyse these quotes in depth?

Current Grade// D

STATEMENT:“Many of the characters in these tales are symbolic or are symbols: they represent aspects of human nature or society”
HOW FAR DO YOU AGREE?

Many of the characters in The Bloody Chamber symbolise strength and some symbolise weakness. Some of Carter’s female characters are able to represent aspects of human nature. For example, the female characters learn to control their lives from men who seek to control them, while others must change themselves, even their species in one case. For example, in “The Erl-King”, the young girl resolves to “take two huge handfuls of his rustling hair as he lies half dreaming… wind them into ropes…very softly” and shall “strangle him with them”.
Hey!
This is great, but instead perhaps use shorter quotations and interrogate them in more detail. For example, the dynamic verb
"strangle" plants a sense of fear in the reader and structurally, the long complex sentences could be reflecting the labyrinth feel to
the forest itself.

Hope this helps.
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