PLZ!Could some1 review my first draft?

Ok ppl this is the VERY rough first draft which i just put down without properly referring to the guide yet so looking to improve it drastically. cud u put down ure email address nd i will send it to you cuz i dnt want2 post it here for the whole world to c! btw its for English!

Reply 1

*Katherine*

I'll look at if you want I'm writing an English ps aswell, so i might be able to help.
my email address is [email protected]

Reply 2

mxox

thanks katherine!!
ne one else willing to review it ?? just jot down ure email add here! xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Reply 3

mxox

or can even pm it to u !! :biggrin:

Reply 4

Anne

i have look at it as i jst finished mine. so u can send it to me, that if u like; at [email protected]

Reply 5

RobbieC

I'd be more than happy to give it a read over, and give you some critique (if any is needed :smile:

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Email me it at: [email protected]

Reply 6

Nikki J S

Just remember that some of the people you are asking to critique this for you will be in competition for places :wink:

Reply 7

mxox

thanks ppl i have emailed it to some of you :biggrin:

and nikki thats why i didnt post it on here! lol imagine if the interviewer picked up a very similar looking ps to mine and demanded an explanation!! :eek: