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Pls mark my English language Question 2 paper 1 answer. This is worth 8 marks so it would be much appreciated if u could give me a score as well as improvement comments. Also I am aware that I used “the narrator”too much as at the start of the question it gives me his name so that was my mistake.

How does the writer use language here to describe the narrator’s fright and confusion?
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Firstly the writer uses the repeated rhetorical questions to show that the narrator is confused as he is unsure of himself. He asks himself “What was it?” which shows that he is unsure of what he is looking at showing he is baffled at the sight. He also may be frightened as he isn’t fully sure what he is looking at, therefore it could be harmful. The reader may feel sympathy for the narrator as he could be looking at something dangerous

Secondly the writer uses the semantic field of violence when he describes the animals as “dangerous” and “ wild”. This suggests that the animals could harm the narrator as “dangerous” connotes death. Also the narrator may feel confused as he doesn’t know why the animals may be “dangerous” and “wild”. The reader may feel frightened for the narrator as he may be in a deadly situation

The writer uses the onomatopoeia “shrieking” to describe what the narrator heard monkeys doing. This suggests that the narrator may be very confused as he is unsure of why they are shrieking. He also may be scared at the fact that they are crying out. The verb “shrieking” connotes crying which could further scare the narrator as something terrible may have occurred with the monkeys. Alternatively, this could show that the monkeys have been hurt which could indicate that the narrator may be harmed too making him scared even more.
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Moved to the English study help where more people who know about English should be able to help you
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It's difficult to give a mark or advice without seeing the original text. It looks to be the right length and you have chosen three good features, although 'dangerous' and 'wild' are not directly linked to violence without a wider context. I would guess at 5 or 6 marks. To get more, try to link these methods to comment on the overall effect that the writer is trying to achieve, rather than writing about them as three completely separate examples.
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(Original post by Lit teacher)
It's difficult to give a mark or advice without seeing the original text. It looks to be the right length and you have chosen three good features, although 'dangerous' and 'wild' are not directly linked to violence without a wider context. I would guess at 5 or 6 marks. To get more, try to link these methods to comment on the overall effect that the writer is trying to achieve, rather than writing about them as three completely separate examples.
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